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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2011-08-24 05:32 PM

I heard your laughter
between the lines
and failed attempts
at rhyme and reason
parting ways with a sad smile
remembering that funny little dance
we danced
and I've missed you ever since.

Some days I picture your silhouette
in the starry night
passing without a glance
never truly comfortable
with the surrounding elements
we ran hot and cold and in between
choosing the wrong place and time
while having the time of our lives
brief and fulfilled.

Somewhere in the tall grass
and daydreams
I left you a poem
in shades of blue
and you
left a heady taste
a bouquet I still savor
a vintage season
distilled to tears.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-08-24 05:51 PM

quote:
a vintage season
distilled to tears.

Wow! A fantastic write, dear Lori. Bluesy style at its very best!

Love,
Margherita

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-08-24 06:08 PM

WoW! This is vintage-like stuff, my friend. Very well written.

~ Man who stands on toilet is high on pot. ~

ken206573
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since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

3 posted 2011-08-24 07:27 PM

Wow this is wonderful and beautifully written. I do love your poetry dear Blue.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-08-24 08:00 PM

there is something special about this one...
Lori

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2011-08-24 10:24 PM

Margherita, JP, Ken, and Lori... Thank you all for the nice replies.

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2011-08-25 01:13 AM

"Somewhere in the tall grass
and daydreams
I left you a poem
in shades of blue
and you
left a heady taste
a bouquet I still savor
a vintage season
distilled to tears."

Beautiful.

JL

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2011-08-25 01:18 AM

You're just a damn good writer, Blues.
Ida

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2011-08-25 06:30 AM

babyblue...there are some dunes down the road along the beach....there is tall grass there that this reminds me of...lovely love song lady

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

9 posted 2011-08-25 11:10 AM

Loved the images,
Ms. E

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

10 posted 2011-08-25 01:30 PM

excellent 'write!' ...
[particularly superb ending!!]

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

11 posted 2011-08-25 01:48 PM

I love this,jo perry

soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

12 posted 2011-08-26 02:54 AM

Blues, all of this is wonderful, but this part -

Somewhere in the tall grass
and daydreams
I left you a poem
in shades of blue
and you
left a heady taste
a bouquet I still savor
a vintage season
distilled to tears

Ooh, I like that. It's...I dunno, lyrical. Wordplay and metaphor, just beautiful. Keep it up!!

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

13 posted 2011-08-26 12:14 PM

Oh my, you guys make me smile, thanks so much for your encouraging words.
I appreciate you all.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

14 posted 2011-08-29 12:53 PM

This is some writing. I kept it.

Alison

Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

15 posted 2011-08-29 03:13 AM

"Some days I picture your silhouette
in the starry night
passing without a glance
never truly comfortable
with the surrounding elements
we ran hot and cold and in between
choosing the wrong place and time
while having the time of our lives
brief and fulfilled."

such complex situation, however you wrote so beautifully about it. Fine writing.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"
prasadnatarajan5.blogspot.com/

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

16 posted 2011-08-29 01:05 PM

Wow, enjoyed it all, love the last stanza, especially last couple lines.

j.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

17 posted 2011-08-31 08:58 PM

we ran hot and cold and in between
choosing the wrong place and time
while having the time of our lives
brief and fulfilled.

Somewhere in the tall grass
and daydreams
I left you a poem
in shades of blue
and you
left a heady taste
a bouquet I still savor
a vintage season
distilled to tears.

This is exquisite... beautiful and bittersweet!

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

18 posted 2011-09-01 06:02 AM

A pleasure to read the feelings and thoughts of somebody touched by love and freedom...

Thank you for these words so fine..

Goldenrose.

Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron.

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

19 posted 2011-09-01 06:55 AM

I will answer this with a thought from someone who knew more about such thoughts that are in your poem, than I.

"Ah, when to the heart of man
Was it ever less than a treason
To go with the drift of things,
To yield with a grace to reason,
And bow and accept the end
Of a love or a season?
(Robert Frost-from "Reluctance"

Your reluctance to forget is very human, even in the presence of your present lover...it is no sin to remember..

Love the way this poem moves me to think deeply.

Thank You for it....:-)

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

20 posted 2011-09-01 05:57 PM

I can't even begin to thank you enough!! Each of you are so kind to me and I appreciate you taking the time to read and leave a reply so very much.

Thank you thank you!!

Haf_Alive
Member

since 2011-09-04

Posts 56
High in the Sky

21 posted 2011-09-04 02:52 PM

i love how raw this is, yet still has a huge element of beauty and imagery. inspired me to write. thank you

HAF

Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

22 posted 2011-09-05 04:47 PM

Sweetness sharper in the aftertaste of parting...

Beautifully penned, Blues.

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

23 posted 2011-09-08 06:13 PM

Blues...Smooth flowing and so tenderly written. Enjoyed very much...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

24 posted 2011-09-08 07:11 PM

Wow...really nice...James

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

25 posted 2011-09-18 06:09 PM

Oh dear Lori, this was soo beautiful... even though I'll never find it, I'm about to go looking in a tall field of dreams for that special poem, but then all of your poems have always been very special.

So nice to read you again!

Richard

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

26 posted 2011-09-22 08:46 PM

Thanks so much everyone, I am delighted by your warm replies.
I know I have said this before, but it means so much to share these blue pages with all of you

Thanks again for being here~

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