Open Poetry #47 |
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R (Romance) |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart ![]() |
Romance – the old fashioned way There was something to be said about the way games were once played now we call it internet slang but a long time ago it was even better as a parlor game, Secretaire with chalk and paper, and prettiness wrapped up in secret knowledge, where only two minds merging as one traveled surreptitious byways unraveling secrets of the heart… and if truly connected to one another there was no need but to find the answer in each other's eyes... Imagine… Her hair falling gently over her shoulder glinting in the candlelight I l y (I love you) He, stooping slightly, breathing in her scent, etching Y, I k (Yes, I know) She smiles slightly, pink lips rising to the blush upon her cheeks, writing I t p a f f u (Is there possibly a future for us) And he simply wants to pour forth his ardent truths, and writes, I o b s (I often believe so) Ah, yes, a parlor game of hushed love no extravagance of loud voices, flailing arms, or need of anything other than two hearts quietly writing I l y ~*~ © krj 8-16-11 Sparked by Tolstoy, AK 66502 |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love this tender rendering of once upon a time Romance shorthand, dear Karilea. "Itpaffu" makes me wonder about how long it took him to interprete it ![]() Such a lovely love game! You set the ambiance and made me share in the magic. Love, Margherita |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Very well done, Sunshine! You brought romance-R- into the text email age. Quite clever, and still very romantic. Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I never played the game, but I played the game without the codes, if you understand. It would have been fun though. ~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Way cool sweetie! WCS! Lori |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie...You must have made this game up. I never heard of it. (but there was spin the bottle) I guess I came along too early, or too late. Enjoyed this...I'll bet it was fun. |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..much enjoyed..quite excellent.. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Poets. While making my first read of Anna Karenina [finally!] I was ever amused at this game, first for its given name, Secretaire, and it's encryptive nature. The poem came easily. And if the name of the game can be anglicized in any way, then "secret air" still fits, doesn't it? ![]() They don't imagine games like this much anymore, do they? "The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy |
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shelerellaSP Junior Member
since 2011-08-12
Posts 42 |
Makes me yearn to hop a time-machine to land on "surreptitious byways" and engage in games engaging of so many sentiments... "where only two minds merging as one traveled surreptitious byways unraveling secrets of the heart…" this caught my heart in a way I cannot explain! Thank you for this lovely write!! |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
where only two minds merging as one traveled surreptitious byways unraveling secrets of the heart… and if truly connected to one another there was no need but to find the answer in each other's eyes... I love these lines, Sunshiney One. *S* I would probably have failed at the game... come to think of it, I did!!! LOL |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
You did good, my friend...wonderful piece! j. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Wonderful writing this Sunshine. The ambience and scene created is marvelous! "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow... That was... That was... I think I need a cold shower... Nice write Ms. sunshine!! JL ![]() |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing on one of my favorite subjects...James |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
simply superb! "P.I.P.-land" by the cyber-sea could use much more pure 'Romanticism' these days, methinks?! |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Completely adorable! One of a kind!!! Loved it!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Very nice, Sunny I don't think that this kind of romance is out of date, or old fashioned..but I do believe that the skills involved are being lost, and that is a shame for society. Love the poem. |
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