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After the Demonstration |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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Back in the sixties, early seventies I had a short affair with a woman I really liked, but was unable to deal with her hatred of America . . . Thus this poem was born. we could have been friends back in the day before you sour’d on the world and thought your beauty was sinful ugly and damned when your hair was waist-length black as road tar catching the suns rays in multifaceted hues I wish we’d known each other before you decided you hated the country you were born and raised in I’d liked to have been your first lover somewhere ankle-deep in soft green clover when you looked at the world with not so jaundiced eyes with your rimless glasses part of your rebellious uniform the beginning of your severe asceticism and entrenched anger I would have loved to have held your hand with a gentle squeeze from time to time letting you know I was there with you and would always have your back I can see deep within you the fresh-faced, slightly freckled young lady in your early teens before you found hate as your companion and shut the door on the past forever as you fought for the common man spilling blood as though that makes it alright you spout your venom with hysterical speeches on college campus after college campus drunk with the sound of your own voice you quote from Mao’s Red Book your Bible as though it makes a difference really I watch as you lie beside me sleep has returned to you your innocence your youth your passion for life not destruction and upheaval I’ll be gone when you awake to never forget you and what this night brought me but I cannot stay I am your enemy. ~ If work is so terrific, why do they have to pay you to do it. ~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Jerry, this is beyond a doubt one of your most insightful poems yet. You have made me feel for her, and left me wondering if she ever came to terms with her place on this planet. Excellent writing, my friend. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
She went by the name of Fawn, I never knew her true name. I sincerely doubt that she ever grew up, and might well be involved in someway in what is happening to our country today. Thank you, Sunshine, this was written with much passion and sadness. ~ If work is so terrific, why do they have to pay you to do it. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Passion and saddness is like a rose vine in this poem...intwined with beauty and pain. This is a new favored piece of your work for me. Excellent Jerry Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Lori, I appreciate it. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Excellent writing, Jerry. This left me wondering about a good many people I remember from that time. Something to think about. Ida |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
when your hair was waist-length black as road tar catching the suns rays in multifaceted hues what description, she must have been very beautiful!. Fine writing, Jerry.  "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Ida. Yes, it will give you thoughts in that directin, I believe. Appreciate the comment, Prasad, and yes, she was an A1 beautiful girl. Thank you. ~ If work is so terrific, why do they have to pay you to do it. ~ |
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Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
I think, no make that I know, she needed you. You would have balanced her and more. Write on my friend, Marcis |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
That’s the ticket!! Great write my friend. Met a few like that too. Worst of all Jane the Bee with an itch…Fonda! JL |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate the comments, especially about Hanoi Jane. ~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
This hit me in the gut JP2. Well done, ebonygirl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
If it did that, ebonygirl, it did what it was supposed to. Thank you so much for stopping my as often as you do, it is very much appreciated. ~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is a wonderful and bittersweet remembering... I loved every line. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Excellent write, dear Jerry. A perfect reflection of a historic moment interwoven with personal emotions. Love, Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, it was bittersweet to say the leas5t, suthern, I appreciate you stopping by. ~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Margherita. It seems dark thoughts always pop up in my thoughts concerning the past. Concerning this young lady I also remember the sweet. ~ I knew drugs weren't the answer. I just had to find out for myself. ~ |
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