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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2011-08-09 04:51 PM


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She sings a song
With no words

So why is it
I see the sun
Going down slowly
Where a Western horizon
Meets the sea

There seem small fires
Burning in the valley
Just rising over mountains
A silver crescent moon

Autumn leaves
Night birds calling softly
A sense of supper
In the breeze

And men turn
If only momentarily
And remember someone
They’ve never known


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© Copyright 2011 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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1 posted 2011-08-09 06:05 PM


quote:
And men turn
If only momentarily
And remember someone
They’ve never known
Indeed!

This one leaves you with a sigh.

Well done.

Michael

katahdin
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2 posted 2011-08-09 10:43 PM


Nicely done, enjoyed.
Kat >^..^<

The Shadow in Blue
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3 posted 2011-08-09 10:48 PM


This reminds me of a poem by William Stafford. Enjoyable.
jwesley
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4 posted 2011-08-09 11:39 PM


I agree with Micheal's choice of highlights, my friend...have looked over my shoulder more than once...

Enjoyed,

j.

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5 posted 2011-08-11 02:30 PM


I read this very slowly to imbibe the beauty, peace and ambience of each line and to touch the sounds and the silence.

That last stanza is breathless-beautiful!

Owl

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6 posted 2011-08-16 10:49 PM


Especially love that last verse.
                            Ida

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7 posted 2011-08-16 11:03 PM


John,

May I put this in my library?

Oh, thank you!

I know it wasn't in any way
intended for anyone other than you know...
But I might wish that someone, someday,
would say something so beautiful, upon
reflection of all that the sun
upon whom this shines, does for us.



"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

Huan Yi
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8 posted 2011-08-17 08:06 AM


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Thank you all
and of course Sunshine . . .

Thanks again


John


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JL
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9 posted 2011-08-20 05:54 PM


Very nicely written.

JL


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