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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2011-09-30 10:06 PM

So I Said

So I said to myself
I won’t do this again,
Write to you, talk to you
As if you are still here,

And yet, here I am,
Talking to you as I always have
Knowing that you are still on
The listening end,

And we go on.

It was in the overwhelming
What word do I insert now?
In the scrabbling moment
When the internet computer was
Overtaken by you! I know it was you,
For when the game is easy, I know
I’m beating the computer….
But you taught me too well, and
You took over the game, making me work
For the point.

That’s when I knew you were here, now.

You and I, we have scrambled our
Scrabble far too well to not know
One another.

~*~

And my loss of you told me to go
And tell my spouse,
Please, help me take care of you,
It is too soon for you to leave, and given
All that was last year, with you,
[and others]
I need you to live.

Too many have gone, Louise, since
You left all of us behind.
And I still know your mind, my dear,
Otherwise,
I would have not placed your name
Here.

Welcome my friend Dori, for she has arrived
At His doorstep. And bless himself, that he might
Want to take a few more steps, with me.

Love, K

© KRJ 9-30-11

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-09-30 10:23 PM

Beautifully sad, and exquisite in the rendering, Sunshine. I get that feeling that you described in the first part of this poem. I get it every once in a while. When I think of a line to compose and then my fingers go ahead and click on the wrong keys, and it comes out perfect anyway. Yes. I understand.

~~ Those who are silent are the first to be shot. ~~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2011-09-30 10:30 PM

Absolutely beautiful write my friend. Wish I could be so versed.

j.

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

3 posted 2011-09-30 10:58 PM

Warm, soothing, inspirational...
Heartfelt.
Enjoyed so much, Sunshine.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2011-10-01 01:40 AM

To be remembered so dearly
and shared so clearly...
you make Louise real to those who never had a chance to meet her.

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

5 posted 2011-10-01 01:42 AM

WOW, Sunshine, enjoyed much, ms. e

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2011-10-01 10:14 AM

This connection continues to bless you and us.

Love,
Margherita

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2011-10-01 01:10 PM

Tears were threatening with every line... they poured with the last two.

Whatever inspires us to tell someone how much we love and need them is a gift... for regrets are acid on a soul. Bittersweet and beautiful write!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

8 posted 2011-10-01 02:55 PM

Very touching write, Karilea,
Ida

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

9 posted 2011-10-01 03:03 PM

quote:
And yet, here I am,
Talking to you as I always have
Knowing that you are still on
The listening end,

I like to believe my father is still on the listening end. As long as the feeling's there, we should never give up the speaking.

I can only echo the Wows in reading this, K... and give you a well deserved (hug).

Michael

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

10 posted 2011-10-01 07:39 PM

Very loving/ nicely done, Sunny..
Wendel Berry said something I will paraphrase..
I bet she's eatin' peaches off some mighty fine trees.

What "pulled" me here is that I am never dissapointed when I arrive.
What I have taken away is words of a poem that I mix in with all the other beautiful poetry that I have read. See above, how Mr. Berry's words came into my mind?

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

11 posted 2011-10-02 02:23 AM

Breathtakingly touching and beautiful! I know she can not only read it, but hear your words, Karilea.

Tears
Owl

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

12 posted 2011-10-02 09:21 AM

Very touching...you make those that do not know her, feel as though they do.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

13 posted 2011-10-02 09:54 AM

Karilea, I feel the "listening" today... and the "missing of"

M

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