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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Low trolling gray cloud searching the byways for its own sole born loser ~*~ (c)KRJ 8-4-11 |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
That cloud can pass me by today....I don't care if it is raining...my skies are blue  Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"own sole born loser" Somehow I sorta identify with those depressing woids. ~ If I agreed with you we'd both be wrong. ~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
lol JP, I was just hoping she wasn't referring to me in that line. AS usual, you say much with very little, K. I'm just wondering if that cloud is carrying a humungous lightning bolt in his back pocket?  Michael |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Gentle Lady...of course your skies are always blue...you live in the land of OZ! Gentle Men...I won't say "if the shoe fits" because as we age, feet swell, so most nothing fits ever right for the whole day. Actually, this is a vision that greeted me at 0:stillearly when I went in to work today. I swear this cloud was SO low to the ground that I could have made my nearly 60 year old bones jump...and touch the danged thing. And just the way it morphed along I could have sworn it was in search...and then of course the usual numbing cliches skimmed my brain and I tried to find a way to give it new life. That's my story, and I'm sticking to it! |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..very nice, Sunshine---but isn't there more, more, beyond the dispersal..spiros |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are something else, inspried by a cloud no less, and you DID give it new life. How delightful this is!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie...if you blow real hard maybe it will come this way. I'd love a good raincloud...but it has to be good. |
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Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
Dear Sunshine, Three beautiful lines that compel contemplation and through the cloud your own sunshine radiates. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Spiros, there is always more, but the day I wrote this, it was enough. Bluesie, I'm easy to amuse... LOL... Martie, when one can stand surrounded by a cloud and be lifted by it? Pure joy! Thank you, Marcia. Those are very kind words. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-07-2011 12:39 PM).] |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
 JL |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
K, I'd venture to say the new life you gave it far exceeded the old one... Not only in brilliance, but the old has passed but this one rages on. Michael |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I think it found my sister's yard. *S* She was sitting on her carport this afternoon when she thought her house had exploded behind her. Fortunately, the house is okay, but lightning struck the tree in back... Parts of the tree are all over the neighborhood. As it happened, a tree removal crew was working 2 houses down... They quickly gave an estimate of $2500 to remove the remains. My sis is grateful they're all okay... but a wee bit grumpy over the unexpected expense! *S* You say so much in so few words... and I say nothing with many. LOL Loved the poem, though! |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
I know there is a silver lining in that grey cloud. Enjoyed, Sunshine, Ms. E |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing, poetic observation! "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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