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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2011-08-03 05:05 PM


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Lord of the world
As far as you are
You take the time
To be perfectly still

Watching leaves
On the trees
As the wind
Passes by
A fly on the sill
Rubbing its legs

Flights of birds
Through the summer air
The way Elysium’s clouds
Journey in shades of green
On the long front lawn

Tonight by stars
You couldn’t
And would not
Care to name
You yourself will travel
As stoic Odysseus again
Between the Pillars of Hercules
Seeking new lands
To call your own

And return
When you can
And if the gods allow
To rest in the silence
Of all you know
Without the urge
To purr  


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© Copyright 2011 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
ebonygirl
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1 posted 2011-08-03 07:38 PM


Enjoyed your poem,
ebonygirl

tuffluv66
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2 posted 2011-08-03 08:43 PM


A good read
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2011-08-04 05:22 AM


A pleasure to read and associate.
Huan Yi
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4 posted 2011-08-04 10:37 AM


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Thank you all

Sometimes I seem
to get it right . . .


Thanks again


John


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Sunshine
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5 posted 2011-08-04 04:36 PM


John,

First, in my opinion, you got this right
all the way to the bank.

Secondly, it reminds me of McKuen, who for
me is a very favored poet.

Thirdly? You make me miss my kitties.
Thank you for this...it was very fuzzy!





"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

Juju
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6 posted 2011-08-04 04:39 PM


Lovely

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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7 posted 2011-08-07 04:36 PM


I am willing slave to a couple of creatures who'd give you a subtle blink of eyes in appreciation of this. *S*

Their typist loves it, too.

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8 posted 2011-08-12 12:21 PM


I think you got this very right, John.  It needs to go through the pass one more time.

A

Marchmadness
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9 posted 2011-08-12 12:35 PM


Enjoyed!
      Ida

Prasad Nataraj
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10 posted 2011-08-12 02:44 AM


Fine poetry.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

secondhanddreampoet
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11 posted 2011-08-13 05:13 AM


For whatever my humble opinion is worth (or not) this 'write' is
especially exceptional (and even far more so without the last line)

"And return
  When you can
  And if the gods allow
  To rest in the silence
  Of all you know ..."

OwlSA
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12 posted 2011-08-13 05:19 AM


An exquisite painting illustrating how well you know, understand, love and bond with your cat.  My favourite line is the last one.

Owl

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