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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2011-08-03 06:32 AM

I would not have openly mentioned Arizona
or those stones I coveted against your skin
when you leaned back against that afternoon
and closed your eyes around pretend places

you mentioned how the sun felt like breath
and it was so bold where it touched you
like it was a lover without permission
just taking your secrets away from shadows

my eyes too were like the sun on your charms
but you said you didn't mind the traffic
as long as I took my time in some places
to fully understand your watering process

and how you didn't need seed to grow things

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daark

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2011-08-03 08:40 AM

Arizona is lovely on you.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2011-08-03 09:03 AM

thanks sweet sun..

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-08-03 01:21 PM

Gotta love it, and I do. This say much and says it in your own special style. Something mush have come over me, but I "got" it. Then again, maybe not.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2011-08-03 01:23 PM

Thanks JP. Glad it slipped in to your thoughts.

ice
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since 2003-05-17

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Pennsylvania

5 posted 2011-08-03 02:17 PM

Excellent poetry-enjoyed

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2011-08-03 02:19 PM

Thanks ice. Appreciated the read.

ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

7 posted 2011-08-03 04:24 PM

Keen observations, Dark.
Nicely done,
Ms. e

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2011-08-03 04:33 PM

Thanks macho ms E

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

9 posted 2011-08-03 05:41 PM

The last stanza is my favorite. At first I wasn't sure where you were going with the poem, but I had one of those 'Ah-ha' moment where everything just made sense. Well done, Stranger.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2011-08-03 06:10 PM

Thanks much Falling Rain...

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

11 posted 2011-08-04 05:35 PM

Always a pleasure reading you, Mr Dark. I shall be visiting Arizona soon but no ... "watering process" awaits.

Helen

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

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West Coast

12 posted 2011-08-04 05:43 PM

ms bunch...it might rain? thanks lady friend

Martie

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California

13 posted 2011-08-04 06:01 PM

DS...I've always loved Arizona and enjoyed yours.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

14 posted 2011-08-06 01:59 PM

Just love how you slant the sun at just the right angle.

Charming on you, dude~

Word Weaver
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since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

15 posted 2011-08-06 08:00 PM

When you read lines like:
"when you leaned back against that afternoon
and closed your eyes around pretend places"
you know you've read a great poem.

tuffluv66
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since 2011-05-13

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Iowa, U.S.A.

16 posted 2011-08-06 10:12 PM

Exceptional writing

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

17 posted 2011-08-07 07:38 AM

ms martie,, thank you lady friend...

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babyblue, thanks babe...you do smile me

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ms weaver, you bless me with your reads, thank you

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tuff' thanks much amigo

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