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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA 
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I wish to write about fairy tales of love that when I was a child couldn't get enough of I wish to write about matters of the heart but pain set in from the very start no whispers of I love you pretty lady or how do you do? just ignorance and sorrow and love ya tomorrow for pity sakes too many mistakes I lay them out I see them clear without a doubt the conscious is just and the guilt is fair but now my love is what I need to share... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Aw, Angel4aKing, I think as a child we, of course thought like a child. Reality slapped most of in the face so hard it took some of us decades to recover. I loved this poem. So much so that I am keeping it for future reading. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"the conscious is just and the guilt is fair but now my love is what I need to share..." You ended this piece wonderfully. I've often wondered if love conquers all... or causes all, when it comes to things like guilt and conscience. one may never know. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Thank you Jerry, And I really do wish I could write love poems, never could really ..... for some reason I am drawn to the pain I guess of sorrow.....and love scares me off.... Take care and thnx 4 stopping by to read!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
I believe it conquers all .... if we just let go and let love do it's magic!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing, on a complex subject. "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
angelbaby...you can write love poems let me know if you want help...it is all where you place your chair... |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I think love is first finding the right person to give it to, one who sees and appreciates it for what it is. Secondly it is the letting go of pain and fear so that we can truly be free to give everything we are to another. It is difficult to let yourself be that vulnerable. |
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tuffluv66 Member
since 2011-05-13
Posts 121Iowa, U.S.A. |
Yes, first you have to finally let go. Angel, first write, write more, then write some more, write all of the pain and fear and bleakness down; then what you seek will come. Some of the greatest poems in history where written at the poets bleakest moments. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Greetings, and thanks for this write and your posting of it here. As for love poetry in the midst of too-oft-reinforced sorrows, I here refer you to the shoulders of a giant: Oh as I was young and easy in the mercy of his means, Time held me green and dying Though I sang in my chains like the sea. - Dylan Thomas, Fern Hill I guess much of it is in the cadence or rhythm, which makes all poetry at first galance a proper fairy tale.  Poets do not shoot fish in barrels, we woo them---and the barrels, too. |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Prasad Nataraj, Thank you vey much for stopping by to read! Dark Stranger, Thank you for reading and I am sure you speak the truth and my chair has been misplaced!!! Marilyn, Thank you for your comments, underappreciated love is the hardest to get over, turst me I was married once and found no inspiration there....and leaving myself vulberable is a mistake I have learned to fear making again!! Take care!!! Thank you Tuff, Letting go isn't easy when all parties are hanging on tight for different reasons....take care and thanks for stopping by to read!!! easy1, I LOVE this, it does come easy when we are young and then we become cautious as we get older literally held captive....Take care and thank you much for stopping by to read!! "Oh as I was young and easy in the mercy of his means, Time held me green and dying Though I sang in my chains like the sea." - Dylan Thomas, Fern Hill ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This was a well-rounded poem in thought and sound. Enjoyed it. Thank you. |
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