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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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been raining in Thibodaux for weeks intermittently raining every day I like rain rather I used to like rain but this July, 2011 rain startin' to bother me see, the air here has turned thick and syrupy hard to breathe overcast all the time even when it isn't raining humidity is so thick it clings to women's clothing shaping breasts prominently I look yes I do, but even that can get old I'm beginning to have a cauldron of an attitude it never stops even when it isn't raining it looks like rain gloomy, dark days never been through anything like this this . . . constant rain forest kinda weather uneasiness kind of weather wake up each morning swimming in slime at least that's how it feels clingingness, like a stalker I think I know what it is to die they say ego is the last part of the organism to go that's what ghosts are really, honest its true ghosts are dead egos how about that the rain rain, rain, rain getting to me upsetting how I think at night I see my dead egos so I guess that old saying that egos are the last to die uh, or maybe not . . ~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Bayou blues again my friend? I feel your pain, we're not insane.  Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Bayou blues, you got it, Lori. That and these damn shingles AND withdrawal from all the friggin' pain pills. Whoop-de-do! ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, if I didn't know better I'd think you were writing about Central Florida. Everything there is slimy from the humidity, even without rain. Believe me, I've felt this exasperation before. "honest its true ghosts are dead egos how about that" That line intrigued me. I think you're dead on in that assessment. Good write. Michael |
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Word Weaver Member
since 2011-03-06
Posts 437California, USA |
Let's be grateful it didn't rain on the cotton crops in Texas. I like your poem very much and especially the originality of the lines, "I'm beginning to have a cauldron of an attitude" |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Appreciate the thoughts, Michael. Louisiana isn't that far away from Florida, its all swamps paved over. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You got that right about the rain in Texas, Marcia, appreciate the nice thoughts. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
JerryPat2, Enjoyed your poem. I've never felt rain and weather like that but you sure did make me feel as if I was in the middle of it. ebonygirl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Hah!! I might have gone overboard a wee bit, ebonygirl, you know how we can get when we're on a roll. Thanks for being here. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I feel for you, It is very seldom humid here (hot but not humid) so I had never really experienced that kind of humidity until I took a trip to Dallas, Texas, a few years ago. It was awful. I was only there three days but it felt much longer. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, I used to live in Dallas, and as bad as it got there it can't hold a candle to south Louisiana. Thank you for stopping by and commenting, I surely appreciate it. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Stand naked (in the dark of course)of it's fall, my friend. Mother Nature has her own way of cleansing, of easing the mind, of making one whole again within one's self. Awesome write. j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Wouldn't you know it, j, I posted this poem yesterday and today it is sunny. Thank you for the advice, and I might try the getting naked, I could get away with it around here. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing, Jerry. I can relate to that kind of weather, it as been that sort of weather here almost all my life. “at night I see my dead egos so I guess that old saying that egos are the last to die uh, or maybe not” Like these lines. "The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts" |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I'd be plum loco if I was raised in this kind of weather. But maybe not, if that was was all I knew, it was be "normal." Thank you, Prasad, for stopping by to read and commit. ~ Forget the health food. I need all the preservatives I can get. ~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL... Being a native of Louisiana, I was raised in that kind of weather... and might well be plum loco. LOL But just across the border, we're getting all the humidity but none of the rain... send some across the Sabine, please! *S* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I can't suthern, it has finally left here and were I do not know. The same ones who were bitchin' about the rain are now bitchin' about the sun and the heat, like they are surprised there would be heat in SUMMERTIME! ~ Man who fish in other man's well often catch crabs. ~ |
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