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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2011-07-26 02:58 PM



With a sigh,
There was a tear in her eye;
It fought to stay inside,
Not be a streak upon her cheek,
It wanted to hide for pride
And she didn’t want to seem weak
So she went away
With things still left to say.

Gloom

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ebonygirl
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1 posted 2011-07-26 03:06 PM


It takes courage to stay and be vulnerable.
Thank you for your poem,
ebonygirl

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-07-26 05:14 PM


I really like this. The tear, the reluctant tear. Fighting the battle of the treacherous cheek slide.

~ Money can't buy happiness, but broke can't buy anything. ~

Marchmadness
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3 posted 2011-07-27 02:07 AM


Hi Professor Gloom, Glad to see you back and with a great little poem to remind me what I have been missing.
                              Ida

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4 posted 2011-07-27 11:38 AM


Having done that "I will not cry, I will not cry, I will NOT cry in front of him" retreat too many times, I can appreciate how well you've captured the situation... great write!
Professor Gloom
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5 posted 2011-07-27 02:03 PM


Thank you all,
Pleased you enjoyed this
perhaps the other side needs a view too?

Gloom

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6 posted 2011-07-31 12:34 PM


I second what suthern said.  It's how I feel too.

A

Angel4aKing
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7 posted 2011-07-31 11:32 PM


me plus a greyhound bus I have been there!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

jwesley
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8 posted 2011-07-31 11:42 PM


Very, very well done, my friend. Emotions came through perfectly.

j.

Prasad Nataraj
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9 posted 2011-08-02 02:45 AM


Wonderful poem captured the moment so powerfully. Fine writing.

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"

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