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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2011-07-21 11:31 AM



Their tonal qualities arranged the words are made to sing
The stasis of the page denied for they have taken wing
More than a flight of fancy this, a symphony of sound
Surreal in it's magnitude an orchestration found

beyond the confines of the lines, unlimited in scope
An opus born of innocence, impassioned, full of hope
As synergy of notes suspend all disbelief that words
Until they have been vocalized are seen but never heard.

© Copyright 2011 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2011-07-21 12:06 PM


She's gonna love this!  I did! For me, the poem felt like silk. amazing!
Lori

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2 posted 2011-07-21 12:23 PM


Yep. She can't help but be mesmerized by your beautifully constructed words. I really did like them myself. This grabbed me . . .

"More than a flight of fancy this, a symphony of sound
Surreal in it's magnitude an orchestration found"

~ Eggs and bacon, honeymoon style / What's honeymoon style? / Straight up and hard. ~

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3 posted 2011-07-21 01:01 PM


Beautiful write Dr. Moose. Great cadence.

Marcia
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Dr.Moose1
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4 posted 2011-07-21 06:15 PM


Lori,
Thanks so much "felt like silk" definately what I was going for in an audible way.
Doc

JerryPat,
My thanks to you also. This is not my usual fare these days as I would rather spread some laughs around, however, this seemed a more appropriate response to the honor recently bestowed on me by Ms. Sunshine.
Doc

Marcia,
Many thanks to you, I am familiar with some of your posts as well as your website, all very fine indeed. In fact, I've been considering an additional venue for posting some work if possible.
Doc

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5 posted 2011-07-21 09:21 PM


Oh Doc....

Wow.

What could one say to such a silky song such as this? I am beyond words, but wait...I hear a whisper...

I don't think I've ever had a song written for me. I've had some sang to me, yes, but an Opus 1? Now I'm smiling, because when one numbers an Opus, it means that more might come along in time.

Now I'm chuckling, because I sense that your time is very precious indeed, as you are only here when the moon is in the right frame of your soul.

So I'm blathering. Suns blather by sending out firestorms that can stop electrical waves here on earth, but you know that.

Now that I've read this, you've germinated yet another poem for such poets like yourself. Since I'm "off" work for the weekend, [even though I'll be at a writer's seminar in Lawrence on Saturday and have an issue article to work on] I feel the poem growing, thanks to you.

By the way, this is my long way of saying

Thank you my friend
For thinking of me
Amidst all of your
Jocularity
Amidst the form
Of my poetry,
Bless you, Sir,
Of writing for me.


Hugs, friend.

"The business of the poet...is to show the sorriness underlying the grandest things and the grandeur underlying the sorriest things." Thomas Hardy

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6 posted 2011-07-24 08:45 PM


Love this.  Truly love this one.
Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2011-07-24 09:06 PM


Alison,
Thank you m'dear. As a fellow student of the craft, I'm sure you're familiar with the "flow". Sometimes it just rolls, it may not be good, but the words just come tumbling out, they will find their way.
Doc

ebonygirl
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8 posted 2011-07-24 10:07 PM


Nice!
Ebonygirl

Dr.Moose1
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9 posted 2011-07-27 07:27 AM


ebonygirl,
Thank you, every once in a great while, when I'm not doing "stand up", I actually try to write poetry, lol.
Doc

Sunshine
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10 posted 2011-07-27 05:30 PM


I'm still enjoying this so much, Friend Moose!




Michael
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11 posted 2011-07-27 06:34 PM


Wow, this is magnificent Doc.

I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Michael

Martie
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12 posted 2011-07-27 07:34 PM


You're a wonder, Doc!
Dr.Moose1
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13 posted 2011-07-28 04:04 PM


Sunshine,
Yanno, I re-read it myself and it still slides right off the tongue with the alliteration. Thanks gal.
Doc

Michael,
Thanks, I've probably been at this now for roughly 17 years, the tools are there, I just have to put them to use once in a while, lol.

Ah, Martie, thanks, so are you,
I've tried to borrow your paintbrush on more than one occasion, but that one's custom made for your hand only. Be well m'friend.
Doc

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