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Geodesic
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since 2011-06-08
Posts 13
England

0 posted 2011-07-09 07:02 AM



Sown, in a fledgling heart
Under all conceivable armour
Grown, with cordial art
Gracious hand and benevolent dharma

Redressed in reticent bloom
An exclusive anathema
Thought, for a thousand new moons
And a quest for a dreamer

Tested and entwined
Tendered and combined

The pace of my heart,
The thought of my mind
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© Copyright 2011 Michael G Hibberd - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2011-07-10 02:18 AM


Geodesic, I have read both versions of this, and whilst I like "She" very much, I prefer this one.  Like Bruce (Secondhanddreampoet), rhyming isn't my favourite thing for modern poets, unless the rhyme contributes to the poem - and in this poem, it most decidedly does.  This is exquisite, especially when read aloud, as should be done to all poetry - including visual poetry.  

Owl

Geodesic
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since 2011-06-08
Posts 13
England
2 posted 2011-07-10 06:08 AM


Most kind of you. I appreciate your point.

Feel free, if you so wish, to view my second piece.

Thanks

Mike
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