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martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2011-07-07 05:47 PM

The dust seemed to settle between the two
perhaps the requiem was written too soon

they stopped writing each other
hurting each other as the pain grew

and now silence
as he gave up the fight

and peace settled over the land
and in their hearts

he began to feel her again
hear her again, in his thoughts

in his spirit

He didn't know what happened
the past few weeks, he struggled
as he was drowning...

desperate to find a replacement for her
and so he tried, he met others, but now and again

it all seemed useless,
he gave up

surrendered
to everything

he looked for a new country
a new job

a place where the people are different
values are different

He didnt/doesnt know
if he'll hear from her
if he'll stay
or if he'll go

but somewhere, somehow, he suspected,
somewhere deep in the depths, in the distance
in his silence...

she wept.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2011-07-07 07:46 PM

Oh so very touching and emotional.

Truly a heartfelt poem, martini man~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-07-07 08:36 PM

Taking the third person in this one worked very well for me. It is a good poem, and one many can relate to. that's the thing. We have all had our heartaches concerning the little four-letter word, l-o-v-e.

~ It's amazing how many women a woman can be. ~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2011-07-08 01:49 PM

She probably did. I would think that he would be best off if he worked on healing himself before trying to replace her.

Owl

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

4 posted 2011-07-08 04:56 PM

Thanks for the replies, guys...

hmmm you will y'all will just have to wait for the next poem

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2011-07-08 05:11 PM

And he was probably the last one who wanted her to weep. Well done, poet.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2011-07-10 11:44 PM

Nice...James

Geodesic
Junior Member

since 2011-06-08

Posts 13
England

7 posted 2011-07-11 05:31 AM

What Jerry said. Very personal, good stuff.

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