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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-07-07 05:06 PM



Summer shines a sleepy green afternoon
between meandering billows of white
birds cast shadows then
leaves flutter the light
where breezes been
and scents hitch a ride
from bobbing blooms
far and wide
Summer shines a steamy green afternoon
between billowing pillows of white
clouds cast shadows then
lightning flutters the light
where breezes been
the wind hitches a ride
on thunder booms
far and wide


LGR(C)7/7/11

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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2011-07-07 07:42 PM


Loving how you paint the elements in all their beauty.

So very vivid and truly gorgeous work~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2011-07-07 08:41 PM


Like the repetition in this poem.

Favorite lines; "the wind hitches a ride / on thunder booms"

You incorporated the sights, the smells and the atmosphere. Nice work, Lori.

~ Husbands are chiefly good lovers when they are betraying their wives.--Marilyn Monroe ~

katahdin
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
3 posted 2011-07-08 12:00 PM


Nicely done! Enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2011-07-08 09:33 AM


Those slight, almost unseen changes
of a midwestern summer day...

you done caught them up well in your
webs of thought...


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