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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I hear the sound of your eyes brushing down my armor early before I smell your perfume before you tiptoe into taller and bring to my belly your music we placed our hands on the window and felt the sun going down how the cool was more soothing but you said the warm was love and you loved how it was comfortable the glass was friendly eyes we didn't mind voyeurs reflecting like we were looking back as we went forward more slowly making everything seem permanent then freeze framing with eye blinks ________________ daark |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~you paint the most stunning pictures in the mind, Darkieee~*~*~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
BBBel1e You always make me smile little one. Thanks |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Seriously. I can't even describe how good your writing always is. It's like time charges being planted in perfect sync, on an asteroid, blowing the ground up behind me as I stroll around for a bit of fresh vacuum and radiation. (That's a good sensation!) ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
most humble thanks xgarapanx...I appreciate your reads |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear Dark Stranger, this is by far one of your very best. The feelings you evoke are sublime in every sense of the word, the warm vapor literally rises off the page. Always love how you make the temperature rise and fall to extremes. Lovely weather we're having don't you think? Hugs you dude~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
"we placed our hands on the window and felt the sun going down how the cool was more soothing but you said the warm was love and you loved how it was comfortable ... " now THAT is REALLY fine writing !! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue...thanks doll....you always make me smile with your replies...yes the weather is great for the scoot...it just thumps along and wants more... __________________ secondhand..thanks for the read and comment.. |
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