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1956 Summertime
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1956 Summertime |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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I hope I haven't posted this before. I did a search and couldn't find it. <><><><> she's listening to Elvis (who else?) cocks an eye over at me says he could have every woman in the world but I could make him happy I say, he's a fag she said something I didn't catch cause she turned the volume up so I shut up summer vacation from school she's my girl this year we do it sometimes she's afraid of making a baby so she helps me out in other ways about the baby I'm afraid too though not as much as her I don't think so hot this summer even in the shade even in the morning shade couple of guys came by eying her saying they just wanted to hang out she turned down Elvis smiled and sat up all cheerful like I said she's my girlfriend this year but she's not acting like it one of the guys had a softball she jumped up he threw it to her the other guy got involved I watched how she flirted then cut those dark eyes over to me I'm confused about love if that's what she and I have we say, I love you to each other somehow I imagined love to be something else not playing catch with the guys jiggling everything for them to see nothing is permanent I'm learning that in school though they don't teach it we tell each other we're in love because that's what we're supposed to do we're teenagers I really wanted to play ball with them but I felt it'd spoil it for her in a way I hate to see them quit playing afraid she'll walk away with them ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
As good as Bukowski would write about the era..this poem had me thinking of how good he wrote about the gritty parts of life.. I like him because of that, and also like your poetry because of that. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You put me in some pretty darn good company, Ice, and I thank you for that. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
JerryPat, On the sidelines of love, ain't we all been there watching the game, not sure who's going home, or with whom. Nice write. Doc |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
this is really a good poem -juju |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yep, we sure all have been there, Doc. And it doesn't ever seem to get any easier even as we age. There is that ache in the chest area that just about want to cleave through your skin. Thanks for stopping by. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Juju, I'm happy that you liked it. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Hey, summer 1956 was when I was born! Anyway, your poem speaks to everyone of all ages when it comes to love. We all have to figure out the rules to play. Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Haha! I agree, Kat , even when there are no rules like when we were teenagers. Appreciate you stopping by and commenting. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
summer of '56...you're getting up there my friend...I was only 4 and didn't even know there were such things as girls...ah, the joys of growing older  (Oh, and nice write!) |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
steavenr,I appreciate your being here, and thank you for the comment. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Jerry this is exceptional...the truth is brutal as love can be. Very well done my friend Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yes, Lori, love can and is brutal in many cases. But how would we cope, and what would be do without it? Thank you for being here. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I was 12 in 1956. This conveys that time period very well. Ida |
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Amberzlynnc Member
since 2010-08-24
Posts 229New Jersey |
This reminds me of Bukowski's writing, just as I saw someone else say. It's honest.. Great read! *Amber |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Ida. I sure remember that era vividly. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Amber, as I said to Ice, putting my name in the same sentence with Bukowski's is exciting and fulfilling, and I appreciate the fact that you have one so. Thank you for being here. ~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~ |
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