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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-06-19 08:38 AM



I listen to the black trees along central lane
how they whisper of the wind women dancing
then they lean into my mind road shoulder

dawn has new tattoos on her horizon skin
perhaps she was alone too long in shadows
and gathered the soot finger lingering

there is a scent of freedom on breeze
asphalt perfume bared to bosom valley
with curves beyond that offer salvation

some other sunday will erase this driveway
but today it is eternal, predicted endless
lit by the lies from velvet tongue whiskey

and her eyes when offered over shoulders


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daark

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Martie
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1 posted 2011-06-19 01:22 PM


DS...I miss the winds of So Cal, but here we have our own.  They are knocking the windchimes about as I write this and understand the distance it has come. Enjoyed this.
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2 posted 2011-06-19 01:28 PM


Dark,

It is feels as I am peeking around you as You ride to see what you see.  But, even if I see it myself, it is not the same as seeing it through your eyes.  Your eyes share with all the other senses.

Thank you for the ride.

Ali-san

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2011-06-20 06:44 AM


ms Martie....I am sure you have been down this road a few times...thank you for the wind chimes

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ms ali-san, parts of highway 1 with the ecul' trees scattered in black...seems they are always tall guardians watching.  Would enjoy you riding along anytime little one.

Margherita
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Eternity
4 posted 2011-06-20 04:52 PM


Stunning in its entirety, your visuals are something to get lost in.

Love,
margherita

martiniat8
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5 posted 2011-06-20 05:19 PM


VERY nice, Stranger! Its been a while since I've read your stuff and you have really blossomed as a writer! :-)
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2011-06-20 10:52 PM


I think I need to draw
the line along the dream
from last night...

it might even match
well, might scratch
the way you think...

I don't know. Maybe I won't...

but you always make one want to
write...




Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
7 posted 2011-06-21 06:22 AM


ms mar, thank you lady friend for your eyes.

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mar8' thanks for the read

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ms sun, I can see you moving to the music...and I enjoy how you fit the notes...thanks lady

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