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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2011-06-09 11:23 AM


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Always
When you look at me
I can see the sadness
In your eyes

We were not meant to be
That is something difficult
We must learn to live with
Each in our own way

Others we encounter
Never come nearer
Than failures in comparison
There is this darkness
In the corner of every view
However blue the day

Oh moment stay
Thou art so fair

You and I
Walking hand in hand
Alone together by the sea


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© Copyright 2011 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
1 posted 2011-06-09 11:04 PM


it's hard to believe this hasn't gotten any comments yet...i think it's great even though it's sad...this poem has universal appeal

Love,


Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
2 posted 2011-06-11 11:03 AM


A simple, but beautiful compaction of thoughts and feelings...
Grade A poetry...deserves a gold star

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

Duck1946
Member
since 2011-05-16
Posts 84
Nebraska
3 posted 2011-06-15 11:51 AM


Delightful!
Thoughtful, and insightful!
Loved ever word.

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
4 posted 2011-06-15 09:05 PM


Hand in hand is better than some things. A beautiful poem you have written...
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
5 posted 2011-06-15 09:25 PM


Nicely done my friend...very much reminds me of our own poet "1slick_lady" (Helen) and a photo she used a while back - her standing in the waves along the beach...a favorite of mine.
j.


Huan Yi
Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
6 posted 2011-06-15 10:31 PM


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Thank you all


"moment stay
Thou art so fair"


was intentional.  If you do a search . . .


Thanks again everyone


John


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