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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Each careful touch with pauses placed from heartfelt thoughts of lives erased. As Taps are blown the bugle’s song a tear appears from weak, from strong. A tear of sadness, tear of loss Tear of remembrance, of life’s cost. Quiver of cheek, a sniffle dried for all that gave, for all that died. Many departed to not return from lands of terror, bodies burned. From cliff side graves of shallow fill and hurried prayers, of those who kill. They came to free, they came to save. From birth of morn to waiting grave. They gave a soul, that I might leave a thought, a hope, a moment’s grieve. The beaches bled, the volleys flew from cannon red, from snipers too. And as the sun did set the land they fought, they fought...a gallant stand. A flag unfurled across deep seas in honor of life’s liberties. Where many fell, as others cried American born, filled with our pride. As nations strong remember them, a bugle plays a warrior’s hymn and to the graves of those in rest I give my heart, my soul, my best. And I freely cried |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hey Barry! Nice to see your smiling face again! How've you been??? Miss you around here...not that I'm in much myself these days --- priorities you know. Seems I remember this post... still a wonderful write. hang in there... j. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
thanx Jimmy, good to see your words, yes, sometimes there are things that drive us in directions we see so seldom.. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Nice tribute. ~ Diplomacy is the art of saying 'Nice doggie' until you can find a rock ~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry... Meaningful and poignant as well as beautifully written. I hope all is well with you and your family. Hugs! |
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Brian James Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 147Winnipeg |
Very patriotic. Love the choice of format, makes it sound almost anthemic when read aloud. Since you encourage constructive critiques, I'll say that maybe you should consider writing with a longer line. A few of your lines seemed a little pushed in, like you had more to say than your line length would allow, and you had to trim out some articles & prepositions. Your poem has a lot to say. Still, I do like the fast pace, which matches the imagery well. Reminds me a lot of Tennyson's "Charge of the Light Brigade." Hope you find my comments useful. Just a little observation from a writer probably much less experienced than yourself. Great poem all the same and thank you for sharing. Brian "To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form." |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderful tribute, dear Barry! You have been very much missed. It's so good to see you here again! Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One of your best, ever, m'friend. So glad you had a moment to share it all with the newer members... and a reminder to us older members that you remain as good as you ever were.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Brian thanx for the words...always welcome. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I have come to look forward to this poem each year now, to say the words truly felt by many and in appreciation for all of our brave servicemen. Glad to see you here! |
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