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OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2011-05-29 09:21 AM



ALONE AGAIN
19 May 2011

She turned soft-away,
with goodbye-sadness
and wandered into her welcome-back garden
and drew the flowers and trees
tightly around her shoulders.
This is how
she likes it best,
comfort-alone
with her thoughts
and her friend-warm garden
and her whispering forest
and the birds, serenade-joyous
and the butterflies rainbow-happy
and her Guardian Angel animals heart-close
and their cloud messages exuberant
and her Earth animals closer
and her soul-smile contentment,
and her courage to conquer or embrace whatever happens to her,
and most of all,
her precious, precious freedom and independence.


Owl

© Copyright 2011 Diana van den Berg - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2011-05-29 04:16 PM


Diana....What a glorious feeling to be alone yet so full, not many can achieve it.  Loved your expression here.
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
2 posted 2011-05-29 04:54 PM


Ahh..., nicely done, my friend.

I especially liked this:

"She turned soft-away,
with goodbye-sadness
and wandered into her welcome-back garden
and drew the flowers and trees
tightly around her shoulders."

Very pretty to see.

j.

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2011-05-29 05:55 PM


Thanks, Martie.  Sometimes it can be a little sad, but mostly it is glorious - I don't have to answer to anyone (except my cat and my dog - and that is  pleasure most of the time), and that makes my home a welcoming haven.

Thank you, Jimmy.  I am glad you enjoyed that picture.  I enjoyed the comfort of it.

Owl

steavenr
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4 posted 2011-05-30 11:21 AM


there is a beautiful, soft melancholy to this...oh, and I love your use of hyphenated word phrases...we need a good poetic name for them like
"word weldings"
or
"phrase partners"
or
"letter links"
or
well, you are so much better at using them than I am...what would you suggest?

Margherita
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5 posted 2011-05-30 12:00 PM


and her soul-smile contentment


You expressed your core sentiments most beautifully, dear Owl.

Love,
Margherita  

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
6 posted 2011-05-30 06:01 PM


Thanks, Steaven, for the nice things you said.  

I probably got the concept of the compound words from Gerard Manley Hopkins, except his were pretty much adjectives only.  I like the idea of a name for them.  Firstly, yours seem pretty good to me.  Secondly I am too tired to know whether my name is Diana or Steaven or Something-Else, so can't even begin to think of a name for them right now, but it will be fun to try when I am awake.  Smiles.  

Thank you, Margherita for your kind words.

Owl

EmmaRose
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since 2011-03-02
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7 posted 2011-06-01 03:26 PM


Your alone-world overflows with Life

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
8 posted 2011-06-02 05:31 AM



Beautiful poetry, this is an example of why I read.
The poem is joyously sad..that makes no sense, if used in a general sense...but when you apply it to this poem, I think it does...as its somewhat sad, but not depressing..

Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
9 posted 2011-06-02 01:19 PM


Thank you, Emma.  You have seen and understood the soul of my poem.  Smiles.

Thank you, Ford.  I am honoured by your wonderful words.  What you said makes perfect sense to me.  You have seen and understood the heart of my poem.  Smiles.

Owl

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