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OwlSA
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0 posted 2011-05-29 03:20 AM



PURE
22 May 2011

Touching last shimmer
silver soprano note pure
drenching aching hearts.

Owl

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-05-29 05:37 AM


Achingly beautiful, dear Owl.

Love,
Margherita

2islander2
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2 posted 2011-05-29 08:47 AM


dear Owl, this is delightful, I could hear it, thank you

yann

OwlSA
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3 posted 2011-05-29 09:11 AM


Thank you, Margherita.  I am glad you enjoyed it.

Thank you, Yann.  I am glad you heard it.

Owl

ice
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4 posted 2011-06-05 10:44 AM


The poem speaks to me of love magic..

I see two on a park bench
waiting for dark,
they hear a cardinal nearby--
that gives the "all is well" signal..
in a "silver soprano note pure"
I may be way off here...but this is what I see..

And I hope you don't mind, Diana, if I add two lines--the poem is inspiring..and although it stands very well on its own..these two lines came into my head..

"Touching last shimmer
silver soprano note pure
drenching aching hearts."

With loves potent elixer;
Red bird song at eventide.

Namaste
ford

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