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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2011-05-26 10:22 PM


The only magic
she possessed
was simply
that she wasn't me.

That says too much -

(or just enough)

I damn the wounds that will not bleed.

© Copyright 2011 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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1 posted 2011-05-26 10:27 PM


I hear you. I hear you loud and clear.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
2 posted 2011-05-27 10:15 AM


love the piece.  But don't quite understand the 'keloid' part of it ... maybe I'm just taking it too literal?  Will have to read it again...

j.


easy1
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3 posted 2011-05-27 01:18 PM


"Blessed are the stained glass window pane glass."
OwlSA
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4 posted 2011-05-27 02:39 PM


I believe I get the title and the last line and the ambiguity of "damn/dam", but I don't get how you can believe that you are not magical, but I love the poem anyway, Karen.  Smiles.

Owl

Namyh
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5 posted 2011-05-27 08:01 PM


serenity blaze - A hidden look into what we may see missing in ourselves that we impute is present in the heroes and sheroes we adore and call magical. An aspect of human nature nicely portrayed here. Liked it a lot. Namyh
Marchmadness
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6 posted 2011-05-28 12:54 PM


Some memories just don't heal and if they do they leave a nasty scar. I think most people have a keloid memory or two. Always love to follow where you wander, Karen.
                                    Ida

eminor_angel
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7 posted 2011-06-05 11:58 PM


keloid scars tend to grow even farther than the edges of the original incision or wound. excellent metaphor serenity.
steavenr
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8 posted 2011-06-06 10:57 PM


amazing...so acutely amazing...do deeply metaphorical...excellent write...wow! double wow!!
ice
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9 posted 2011-06-07 07:19 AM


A keloid scar, that any type of surgery cannot remove..In that scar, is a face, that caused the cut...no magic there, it is an emotional wound.

The poem says just enough, although if the scar starts to bleed again, it may cause a hemorage.

Probably best left alone, your inner beauty pales its existance...and your poetry helps to balm.


JamesMichael
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10 posted 2011-06-07 07:09 PM


Nice...James
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