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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-05-26 08:47 PM




Circles
spiraling
steps
twirling
pirouette
around
and
around
I go
coming
and
going
I meet
myself
no time
to talk
in a
spin
I'm in
getting
dizzy
going
nowhere


LGR5/26/11

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JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2011-05-26 08:51 PM


Haha! Gotta love it. Ya made me dizzy, but I hung in there.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
2 posted 2011-05-26 08:55 PM


Wow, it does kind of corkscrew the ole eyeballs down the page doesn't it? Thanks for pointing that out...makes it even better!
Lori

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2011-05-26 09:40 PM


Dance is such lovely physical poetry in its purest form, to my mind's eye, and a "pirouette""?

It's such a great word for grace and you've done it justice, Lori. There's some longing between the lines that I found intriguing.

faithmairee
Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
4 posted 2011-05-26 09:46 PM


ah, very nicely done...reminded me of my ballet dancing days as a teenager...very well-written as usual.

Love,


Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
5 posted 2011-05-27 06:56 AM


Good example of concrete poetry..form and story line match..I enjoyed the visual and the song.
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
6 posted 2011-05-27 09:58 AM


and then you have to lose Alice and return to reality....'life's a beach' sometimes, isn't it.

well done...

j.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2011-05-27 01:41 PM


This is childhood...
adult style.

Good job, young lady.


Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
8 posted 2011-05-28 12:55 PM


Wait! I'm going with you.
                   Ida

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