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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-05-26 07:03 AM


I had plans for that ya know
she said as she gave me a pout
free of charge from over and behind
and watched me take the last one
from the starbucks bananas for a dollar

I could offer you other options
of the same general dimensions perhaps
but maybe not of the same intentions
I replied as I peeled some inches slowly
and made sure her eyes were coveting

and what about the rest of the package
she jingled along with a beemer key smile,
in case I wanted more than just part way
or something that took longer to finish
then what I wanted in just that instant

my heart is in san francisco I offered in reply
and my conscious I left just outside of saigon
a tooth or two under the floor of the mason bar
and I gave too many fingers away to be handsome
but I do have some change left that hasn't yet

she said she would send a truck over later
a semi perhaps to pick up all of my memories
and bring them down to the easy in and out
where she could help me get them all shiny again
and put them up in her special pretty place

I said all I needed was on the harley
or would be as soon as I climbed back straddle
but would follow her home for awhile
and see how my metal looked in her driveway
might have to move that beemer over a little

since I did have a few priorities after all

___________

daark (highway series)

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (05-26-2011 08:01 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2011-05-26 09:27 AM


quote:
my heart is in san francisco I offered in reply
and my conscious I left just outside of saigon
a tooth or two under the floor of the mason bar


and there's the story...within the story.





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2 posted 2011-05-26 11:16 AM


It's a bird!  It's a plane!  It's Innuendo Man! Yay!!!

Love the innuendo .. and love that strumming another place/another time that few of us will ever understand.

You meld it all together so well.  That's why you are on my "favorite poet" lies!

Ali-san

[laughs]

favorite poet" lies???  No, m'dear, favorite poet list.  I surely meant "list".  I say.

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2011-05-26 12:59 PM


ms sun...Thanks lady friend..

___________

ms ali-san I be on your list? like shirt you say..thanks babe

OwlSA
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4 posted 2011-05-27 12:24 PM


Very beautifully expressed, Dark, as always.

Owl

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2011-05-27 04:17 PM


Thanks lady O...I appreciate your eyes
Martie
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6 posted 2011-05-27 06:11 PM


DS...Just thinking how different my life would have been with a harley.
Margherita
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7 posted 2011-05-29 03:19 PM


quote:
she said she would send a truck over later
a semi perhaps to pick up all of my memories



I like all of this and I like the word "covet" in the context you put it.

Your talent is on full display here. (as always!)

Love,
Margherita

jwesley
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8 posted 2011-05-29 05:02 PM


Loved the last line in particular...precisely fit!

j.

Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2011-05-30 06:42 AM


ms martie...oh you would have been in so much trouble...thanks babe

___________

ms mar, thank you special lady


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jwes...thanks amigo

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