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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-05-25 09:22 PM

The salt water baubles washes gently
upon the jetty sent from lands distant.
Pushed by a hovering yellow moon,
sometimes built into thunderous
                hurricanes.
Change comes rapidly and dangerously
as the sea meets yesterday coming back.
It speaks to me and it does say,
I give no quarter and furthermore
                I ask for none.
As I stare outward at the placid waters
I feel heaviness deep inside my chest.
The sea has become humanity to me,
With its powerful and hushed rage,
                 not seen before.
Heretofore I have been persuaded
by wanderlust to skim the surface,
to walk on by time without end,
miss nothing that may be something.
                 I linger here.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-25-2011 10:17 PM).]

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

1 posted 2011-05-25 10:09 PM

Now this is poetry to admire, maybe I have not graduated in my frame of thought or maybe have just caught a different muse but I could not come close to this!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-05-25 10:20 PM

Appreciate your kind remarks, kingsangel. I ventured away from my normal genre, which actually is no genre at all, to write this. I had fun doing it, and actually had to stop and think to make things work, so I guess I'm happy about it. Doubly so that you have given me kudos. Thanks again.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2011-05-26 02:37 PM

A very thought provoking and well written poem, Jerry.
Ida

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-05-26 03:00 PM

Thank you, Ida. Hope you are having a good day.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2011-05-26 06:43 PM

oh I really like this one Jerry! the last line did it for me.
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-05-26 07:41 PM

Much obliged, Lori. Working on a long poem, this is the first of it.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

7 posted 2011-05-26 07:50 PM

yes, it's different but i think it's great...very well written, JerryPat

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2011-05-26 08:12 PM

Hello Faith, good to see you again, and thank you for your kind words.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

callalily
Junior Member

since 2011-05-22

Posts 22

9 posted 2011-05-27 12:04 PM

as the sea meets yesterday coming back.

lots to ponder and imagine here and I like that.. also like the softness of the last line..well done

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

10 posted 2011-05-27 01:18 PM

I like your new coat, Jerry.

Owl

Word Weaver
Member

since 2011-03-06

Posts 437
California, USA

11 posted 2011-05-27 01:39 PM

This is really beautiful Jerry. As a lover of the sea it touched me deeply.
Peace and Love,
Marcia

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2011-05-27 02:23 PM

I thank you very much, callalily. I am very glad you liked the poem.

Haha!! Yeah, I do change coats every so often, Owl. Thanks.

Marcia, I appreciate your kind words and am very happy that you were taken by this piece,

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2011-05-27 05:47 PM

Jerry...From the depth of observation comes depth within...or is it the other way around? I liked this timeless poem.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

14 posted 2011-05-27 06:05 PM

Hah! Martie, don't get me to lying. Thanks for the kudos, they are appreciated.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

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