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Angel4aKing
Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA

0 posted 2011-05-25 06:21 PM


Seen u there
twenty years
back
in my memory

tho the clouds
hid you
from my mind

you were transluded then

and I?

I was deluded

you knew
without knowing
what was not to be known
jus as I remembered
what I was never told

you never really left
did you?

just became invisible
through eyes that went grey
as I got old

and now

through the eyes of my heart

I see you

there again

and you

stay

keeping my eyes

from turning grey....



~~~kingsangel~~~

© Copyright 2011 Julie Ann Campbell - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2011-05-25 08:53 PM


love this nostalgic, class reunion kind of piece. And again, I really like your stutter-step way of writing and your expressions rank high in getting your message across.

~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
2 posted 2011-05-26 05:56 AM


look backs are always healing...like a highway we get back onto after so many years of side roads...cool pen angel
faithmairee
Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
3 posted 2011-05-26 08:03 PM


nice work...i especially like how you ended the poem...enjoye dit much.

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
4 posted 2011-05-27 11:14 AM


lovely words and memories, great romance, so well expressed with tenderness,  thanks

yann

Angel4aKing
Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
5 posted 2011-06-01 10:50 PM


Thanks a bunch for all of your replies I need to get on here more often!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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