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Lethe Argosy
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Lethe Argosy |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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These are but slivers of me-- I take the razor to my selves; once I tried to bring you there but now I think I'll keep my Hell private as the shadow-wings of a big bird's random flight pattern songs of voice that brings more bad omen to us all. oh-listen-to-my-silence-sing a private dirge... (game?) castling. Curlicues of withering, aged wood of whittlings; rising rivers come each spring and these are glances from myself. Don't take this with you-- go. Be well. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like to read your poetry. It's interesting and I enjoy how you use words. A |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
sounds like something was spoken of, perhaps a confession? Perhaps the secret was devulged, and became public information that you thought would remain private? Trust was broken, now trust does not exist. Perhaps I am wrong.. But I love to try to see into core of subliminal poetry... Enjoyed doing that here. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hmmm. Thank you both, so very much. I always consider the replies, and my thinking always seems to be with an editor's eye-- I repeated "private"<--hate when I do that--> and I was wondering, that, if "private dirge..." could become "a nun's song sung" (I actually prefer that line because it has percussive tendencies and delicious undercurrent) but thank you, both, for kind replies. *hearthugs* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"a private dirge"...sometimes I think it is my life I am mourning~~  M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"a private dirge" It stays. Just because you prefer it. *smile* Thanks, Mo.  I think I'll put some coffee on... |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Your writing is surrealism at it's absolute best. This dialogue to whomever carries a message of "I may speak to you, but you will never get a chance to speak back." The door is closed. If the last three lines don't scream that, the rest of the poem doesn't. Nice to see you again, ~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well thank you Jerry. The dialogue was written for "whomever", but I was aiming for the p.o.v. as the river Lethe as the speaker... I appreciate your commments and I thank you all for taking the time. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Intriguing writing, as always, Karen. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, all I had to do was look and understand the title. Sometimes I wonder why I even bother commenting. ~ I went to a restaurant that serves "breakfast at any time" / I ordered French Toast during the Renaissance ~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I was once fond of razors myself but then too many people come around when you screw up and hit a main vein. Such is life and the art of moving on I guess. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh Jer...I'm glad you do bother. the Argosy mag was, well it was such a weird thing for a little kid to read, and I was such a weirdo even then anyhow. Please have a hug, and just know I cycle through being a reader and commenter type and other times, I just feel quiet.You are a dear for being so patient with me, I thank you.  grin...Argosy magazine. Methinks my parents over-indulged us kids in the reading material. But really, that's the only reason I knew what the word meant. As for Lethe, ohhhh, would that we could pick and choose what we forget. But the rain is really nice tonight, isn't it? Love ya hon. And oh my Dixie-dear. *wide smiles* Praying all is well with you, and I'm just really happy you showed up here. And I should start writing e mails again, but it's so much more fun to just slam it on the board. (For those of you who aren't finding this fun, I ask, why are you still reading this?) *winks and supergrins* And Ida, I'm never quite on the ball when it comes to thanking you either. So I thank you now. Ciao good poets. *smooches* |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
you. are. brilliant. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Love to see you verse again and feel its passion resonate in poetic power. David Lester Young |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Nicely done Kat >^..^< |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"pattern songs of voice" ...now that's a cool phrase |
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