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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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0 posted 2011-05-16 09:34 PM


hepatitis yellow
     streetlamp staring down
     out where buses don't run

hiss of the subway
     sounds like a pit bull attack
     hoping buses really do run

desperation staring back
     like long-forgotten ghosts
     catching buses that don't run

funeral wreath hangs askew
     one Texas two-step
     before the buses run

©May 16, 2011 / Jerry Pat Bolton



~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-16-2011 11:00 PM).]

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2011-05-16 10:36 PM


I don't quite get it but I liked it!
Lori

JerryPat2
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2 posted 2011-05-16 10:48 PM


Yeah. I just decided to put my own poem out that doesn't make sense, I see so much of this kind of lately thought I'd give it a try.

~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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3 posted 2011-05-17 04:44 AM


Nothing wrong with a bit of fun, Jerry.  

Helen

JerryPat2
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4 posted 2011-05-17 06:18 AM


Yeah, Helen, I guess I was just in a bad-boy mood yesterday.

~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
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5 posted 2011-05-17 06:20 AM


Nonsense, JP...this poem does make sense.

A person is waiting at a busstop
It is in the middle of the night
They are afraid of the city
They are afraid of being alone
The buss is late
It doesn't come
There is a struggle
A dance of death (Texas two step)
They are killed by a mugger.(funeral wreath)
The end

That's what I see in it, and I'm sticking to it..:-)

JerryPat2
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South Louisiana
6 posted 2011-05-17 08:26 AM


Hah! That's just exactly how I wrote the poem, Ice. You are amazing.

~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~

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