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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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taking it downtown traffic snarly came to a rolling stop front of Earth is in Danger from Right Wing Idiots neon sign blinking words on and off off and on between a street massage spa and porno video store she was sitting at the bus stop caught my eye licked her lips scooped blouse showcasing a stand of freckles disappearing below me fantasying where the rest of them went don't'ja'know crossed her legs takes a certain kind of woman to do that correctly had to turn on the AC in the Taurus in the middle of January whoa she was too cute too bad too young she caught my eye again mouthed give me a ride I unlocked the passenger's side door she opened it when she leaned down to get in I knew I'd done the right thing getting the defenseless young thing off the mean streets that's just the kind of guy I am don't'ja'know thank you she said it's karma I eased back in traffic pleased to meet you, Karma no silly she giggled us meeting like this is karma you know fate I moved back into traffic stealing looks out of the corner of my eye she put me through my paces as she bent leaned back stretched somehow unbuttoned the last of her blouse's buttons damn near rear-ended a car swiveled around in her seat left her bare knee touching my thigh oh, I was a goner, for sure stop here she said I pulled over to the curb she balled up a fist busted herself in the nose with it started bleeding all over everything give me your money and credit cards and passwords or I'll scream attempted rape I looked past her building on the other side of the street was a police station hurry she said, do have any idea how old I am I gave her what she asked for she got out and sauntered off passing right by the police station leaving me a man that should have known better ripped off by a young, but tough player of the street ~ Age and treachery will always overcome youth and skill. ~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (05-15-2011 10:23 AM).] |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
See what ya git for being a dirty old man. I hope this is not a true story, hope you made it up..but if not, hope you learned a lesson from it.. I did enjoy reading it though..happens every day in the city I guess...glad you put it down in poetic terms. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh no, I'm not near as gullible as the one on this poem. Still, it's something to think about, I mean what would you do if this ever happened to you? Thanks Ice, for checking it out. ~ Age and treachery will always overcome youth and skill. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Man! Great read! Awful ending... Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Haha! Yeah, the ending was pretty bad all right. Thanks Lori, appreciate it, always . . . ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I read it to the end and ... now how do I deal with my anger, at her, at him, at such situations?   This, dear Jerry, is a powerful write. No indifference possible! Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I totally agree, Margherita, there is blame enough to go around. Appreciate the response. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Captivating from beginning to end. In my humble opinion, I could not help noticing she actually was quite clutz like in the crossing of her legs, not lady like, not even sexy, more clutzy. LOL But your poem was a winner.  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yes, the picture appears klutzy, perhaps, EmmaRose. I had a problem finding a photo that might have worked better, so I used klutzy. You'd be surprised, however, how many men would be attracted to this woman's klutzy, amateurish and hopeless unsexy crossing of her kegs. ~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~ |
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