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AlCowie
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0 posted 2011-05-13 03:32 PM


I'm feeling I maybe falling in love again
First time in a while, what a wonderful feeling of Zen!

This is less a poem, more a rhyming story in iambic pentameter...

Last weekend's party in the countryside
Started well (except that I got lost,
And couldn't find the entrance to the farm;
I'd trusted my iPhone's maps to my own cost)
I couldn't even get a bloody signal
Outside a pub just half a mile away.
On tippy toes, with one hand in the air
I finally got through to where I was going to stay.

A single malt with ice I duly took
Aperitif to journey made by car
Whilst nuts and pringles my appetite did whet
But not as much as the girls - spectacular!
A couple took my fancy right away
(Two girls I mean; it wasn't a swingers party)
I flirted but I didn't make a play
(Too soon would clearly make me look quite tarty)

The chat was good - was bloody good I'd say
And 10 of us were spread around the table
The two I liked were on the other side
Not next to me, so I was better able
To see their smiles and hear the laughing sound
Whilst showing off that I might be quite cool
(It's all a lie, but so is all their make-up
And loves a game - as well as a bit of a whirlpool)

The supper was of fish (smoked mackerel)
And mixed with mayonnaise and maybe dill
To make a pate dish which was the starter
On crusty bread made in the local windmill
The main itself, a delicious piece of beef
So tender you could cut it with your fork
Washed down with plenty of wine, both red and white,
Which always helps the flow of chat and smalltalk.

And that is when the evening started going,
With drinking games of "What I've never done..."
I hate the game because I always lose
And drink so much I always come undone!
Tonight was no exception to that rule
Although the others also lost a lot
So not a table with much innocence
But much more fun with stories than with not!

I then turned to my new erotic poem
And held forth with a strong and hearty voice
I must admit, the wording's quite descriptive;
I was going to get a snog, she had no choice!
My primary target went outside to smoke
I went outside to join her for a bit.
The chat was short, much longer was the kiss
And good for twenty three, I must admit!

But...
She's the first girl I've thought of in several years
As replacement for a long lost broken dream
Of a girl on a bus who ripped my life apart
Eight years ago (and since then haven't seen)
It sounds pathetic and it probably is
But a broken heart takes a bloody long time to mend
And girlfriends since that time stood little chance
To win me; but-my-heart now seems to be opening again.

The thing is though she's a little out of my league
And good at the game as pretty girls tend to be
So now I have to demonstrate my patience
(If I'm honest with you, it's driving me out of my tree)
As long as she thinks I'm running after her
I will not catch her; I must turn the scene
So she is running after me, and wants me
And maybe that way I can make her my Queen

'Cos she'll only fall in love with what she wants
But young girls like to play at being chased
They want to be desired by many men,
It's fun, feels good; but's not love's fundamental base.
So now I have to try to make her work
So she thinks she wants me more than I want her
I'm out of practice at playing these games of love
But they're the only way to make this girl my fleur.

I know she's interested in me certainly a bit,
She sent me a text just after I'd driven her home
(It was on my route as she lives just round the corner)
But I worry I may've already blown it though
I came on quite keen and asked her out too soon
And so, of course, the intial answer was no,
She was "already busy" on the evening that I offered.
And me asking again will only inflate her ego.

So I must wait and until she thinks she's lost me
If-she does like me, that's how to be Romeo.
And if I have already really blown it,
Waiting a while will certainly prove it so!
Well, we will see within about a week,
I'll make my play like the falling domino
And I'll get a date and happy days! Or not,
And this poem's all I've from the story to show!



© Copyright 2011 Alexander Cowie - All Rights Reserved
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2011-05-13 03:46 PM


great poem-Jeez I had no idea us women were so complicated...Seems like you know your way around, good luck!
Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2011-05-13 03:48 PM


Huh. I was always just bull-headed, but you probably have the finesse to carry this off.

~ Age and treachery will always overcome youth and skill.  ~

Sunshine
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3 posted 2011-05-13 07:44 PM


Okay, so I'm going to enjoy your poetry...

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AlCowie
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since 2011-05-13
Posts 92
London, UK
4 posted 2011-05-15 06:14 PM


Thank you, I will keep the forum appraised in verse as to what happens next (I'm pretty sure she won't read this, so all safe!)
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