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L
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since 2011-05-07
Posts 8


0 posted 2011-05-11 02:47 AM


Here I am.
Please cut me down.
Stab me in the back.
It's what you want.
It's what you desire.
It's what you need.
At least I think so.

You're right.
I thought I loved you.
You never felt the same.
It seems that I was careless.
It seems that I was hopeful.
It seems that I was wrong.
Now at least I know.

Release me.
The argument has ended.
Let the stillness settle.
We were never alive.
We were never real.
We were never in love.
At least you've let go.

I guess it's time I do the same.

If only I could remember how it all began.

I guess it's time I do the same.

At least you've let go.
We were never in love.
We were never real.
We were never alive.
Let the stillness settle.
The argument has ended.
Release me.

Now at least I know.
It seems that I was wrong.
It seems that I was hopeful.
It seems that I was careless.
You never felt the same.
I thought I loved you.
You're right.

At least I think so.
It's what you need.
It's what you desire.
It's what you want.
Stab me in the back.
Please cut me down.
Here I am.

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Juju
Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
1 posted 2011-05-11 03:35 PM


Unrequited love

I dislike the subject(I seem to be in the same situation alot)

Sometimes love and desire get confused; maybe that was her problem. I find that alot people have an ideal, and well when I fall out side of that ideal the greater majority of the time, but you will fond some one you will just admire you for who you are and you should be sure to treasure them  

Best of luck

juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2011-05-11 06:34 PM


Perfect candle...
Follow your heart

faithmairee
Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA
3 posted 2011-05-11 07:42 PM


Welcome to PIP.  I love your poem.  Your delivery was very powerful and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
4 posted 2011-05-11 10:24 PM


Hah! I've found not to beg, they stab plenty without it . . . Well constructed poem.

~ I think we should only read books that wound and stab us.-Kafka ~

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