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The Path We All Must Take
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The Path We All Must Take |
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L New Member
since 2011-05-07
Posts 8 |
Slow-walking on the side of the road, I stare at the sky above. It's a shame we can't reach those heights. Each second that elapses as I observe the road becomes a moment I'll waste. It's been a while since I started. Where is my home? I can't recall it's location. I'll just keep walking. And so I continue at a slower pace as I witness fading memories march on ahead. An old woman with a cane leads the procession as a crawling child shakes his rattle. Now comes a weeping mother whose trembling hands tightly grasp the portrait of a handsome young man. Behind her is a casket borne by uniforms whose faces reveal the faintest hint of remorse. Finally in black and white, a bright young couple arrives side by side, with hands firmly interlocked. The speed of the procession quickens, and soon, these memories leave my sight. I pause momentarily. My legs are anchored to the ground. I feel the earth try to drag me down beneath the dirt. Where am I headed? I stare up at the sky above. I'll just keep walking. Yes, I'll just keep walking. [This message has been edited by L (05-08-2011 05:49 AM).] |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Very powerful poem. Welcome to PiP - I hope to read more of your writing. This one really moved me. Alison |
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L New Member
since 2011-05-07
Posts 8 |
Thank you Alison, I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. L |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
loved it. yann |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Very well done. Welcome to Passions. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I read this with tears in my eyes. My favourite word in the whole poem was "try" because that means that the earth did not succeed in dragging you down beneath the dirt - and I loved the fact that right after that you answer your question "Where am I headed" with looking up at the sky. And my double-favourite lines, are the last 2 lines. Welcome to PIP, from me, too. Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is very much like a recurring dream I have of ...just walking. I never get tired. I never worry about where home is, and the sights always vary... Just walkin'. You hit a chord in me, apparently.  Welcome to Pip. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
An interesting write. Welcome to PiP! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Andrew, what a marvelous poem to begin your journey here in the blue halls. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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L New Member
since 2011-05-07
Posts 8 |
Thank you all for your kind words of welcome. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and I'm excited to submit more of my works here on piptalk. |
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