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a preferential truth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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Tell me there's another flag proclaiming the discovery of land beyond tumultuous seas of us, the leagues of trust we knew fair winds and sweet salt spray-- yes, we thought we could be spared the tides of time and all cliche' were slain by oath sincerity. Tell me. I will understand I'd understand much better than these walls you've built with bricks of days so tall that they consume my nights as you embrace the dark. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: I don't believe, my dear friend, that He raised any particular flag... Just a truth, a belief, a Hope, a promise... But unseen...it only flys on the pole of Faith. I could be reading your poem the wrong way, but this is the response that came forth. Love, me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey lady.  I kind of knew that this one could be taken a lot of different ways, so I promised myself that, I would not try to re-claim it with explanation. Once you post a poem, it really doesn't belong to you any more. And sometimes that's a good thing. Hugs, you. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The darkness is all-encompassing and tar-black. You stare straight down the yellow-brick road and somehow it becomes a hodgepodge of hands and mouths all screaming and reaching for . . . They don't really know. I miss the walls built with lumber which took on our own persona and gave it back to us. The "bricks of days" give us no understanding of truth. ~ Logical argument is what destroys poetry because poetry is beyond logic.—Robert Graves ~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Damn Jer. Your reply is a poem in itself. (hint-smile-hint) Wow. Thank you, and consider my reply to your reply to expound upon those thoughts. Thanks again for reading.  |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
We are heading towards a better world, somehow, I believe, but first we must finish with this one in order to earn our wings. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah, Em. I lack focus. *smile* Everything I try to do seems to end up like a gravel filled pothole, with all good intentions and no result. Thank you, poet, for indulging me with a read. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, I type my replies in Word and then copy them into the reply box. I see that I only copied from the second paragraph which since is lost as it was unsaved. However, I am editing it in, to the best of my recollections: A perfectionist, in my understanding of the word, is somebody who reaches for perfection, and of course, being human, can’t reach it. However, in reaching that high, the results are firstly perceived by the achiever as a failure, and secondly, the results are much closer to perfection than they would have been if he/she hadn’t reached for perfection. (There was something else in my original first paragraph as well, but I can't remember what it was.) You, my dear Karen, are a perfectionist, and we all love you and think that you are wonderful. We don’t know, for the most part, about what you are doing outside of the poetry forum, but you don’t even have the faintest inkling of what a wonderful poet you are! We all do, of course. Are you daring to say that we are all wrong and that we know nothing about poetry? Therefore, if you don’t think you are a wonderful poet, how can we believe you that you fail in other things? I am not for one moment saying that you are lying – you are the epitome of honesty – I am saying that your self-judgment is FAR too harsh. May I make 2 suggestions? First one - List on paper at random, the names of a whole lot of people you know here in Pip and in your non-cyber life. Then go through the list slowly and look at yourself through the eyes of each of those people. I guarantee that you will feel WUNDERBAR after that! Second one – Look back and list your victories. Getting off my soapbox, now and hoping my reply isn’t irritating. Love your poem. Beeeeeeeeeeg smiles and beeeeeeeeeeg hugs Owl [This message has been edited by OwlSA (05-08-2011 07:32 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm so glad someone understands me and my thinking... truth is I oft'times confuse myself! Happy Mom's Day, gal! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"these walls you've built with bricks of days" ...wonderful metaphor...simply a great line, nicely scripted |
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