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ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2011-05-06 06:03 AM

( After reading Rumi, and Tagore for two hours, I heard a zen master speak to a girl,said to be unbeautiful, this is what he said to her)

Only by eliminating inessentials,
Trimming fat to bare bones simple;
Can true beauty be felt, and seen
By the hands, and eyes of a beholder.
.
Instinctual sense, says nothing is permanent
Except for spirit, solids are illusions;
Wabi-Zen, seeks charms within-
Even if without, is cloth-frayed woven;
.
Blemished: thus unwanted, underplayed
The last picked to join romantic games;
.
I beg that you sustain your patience- someone
Is-that comes to touch your flower branch
Now crushed among more supple limbs
With tips of red glossed-lip magnolia cups;
That pale the plum-white blossoms hidden
Clenched within your tiny fisted buds-
.
In obvious, is your blood-sap, flowing
Sucrose-sweet with high desire, just beneath
Your Sabi-plain, and humble face; but wait;
.
A Wabi bee will make appear
To taste the nectar of your kiss,
And be consumed by hidden blossom grace--
That opens up by passions rising heat;
.
Like lilies that have slept all winter--
Breaking surface-- facing May deliberate
.
With dulcet beats of your sweet heart
Thus pumped --desire, will raise, slow- up
To meet your honeyed breath and greet
His tongue to taste ambrosia in his kiss.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-05-06 07:43 AM

Well now, Ice, I know nuttin' about Rumi and Tagore, but assume they are connected with the Zen religion, but I'm going to search them.

What I DO know, however, is that this is beautifully written poem concerning true beauty. Outwardly beauty is a plus, although sometimes it is a negative about how a woman lives her life. Still we seek it, constantly overlooking the beauty within on so many occasions. My take on this is that plan Jane's, the wallflowers of the world have more beauty within that some ever attain, no matter their physical beauty. As your excellent poem says, sometimes it taste an ambrosia tongue to unleash that beauty for all to "see."

Loved this.

I love the sense of camaraderie when an entire line of cars team up to prevent a jerk from cutting in at the front. Stay strong, brothers and sisters.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-05-06 08:42 AM

This was a moving read and very beautiful. It is a much appreciated affermation.
Lori

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-05-06 08:49 AM

Dear Ford, reading Rumi and Tagore lifts us into a different layer of poetic beauty, no doubt! And with this exquisite write you honor them most beautifully.

I am a firm believer of the need of returning to the essential, simplifying our lives and being more connected to Nature and its perfection with imperfections.

Hopefully this zen master didn't convince the Sabi girl with the supple limbs to fast and become an anorexic, just to better bring forth her essence.

When the divine essence radiates through the eyes, as a reflection of the soul, all the rest fades and becomes unessential, yes. But outer beauty, just like wabi-plainness, does not stop inner beauty to surface.
I mean it is not necessary to be plain outside to be beautiful inside. Deepest harmony is obtained when both aspects compenetrate each other, I think.

The soul's language and desire repair the imperfections so that they glow with essential perfection.

Oh, my, you made me think. Thank you for this wonderfully stirring and wise write.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2011-05-06 03:25 PM

Ford, aside from isolated quotes, I haven't read Rumi, but I have read Rabindranath Tagore and love his work, and can see that you have seasoned your own excellent poem with the fragrances of his.

Owl

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2011-05-07 06:55 AM

JerryPat, Lori, Magherita, Owl.
Thank you all for reading, and your reviews..
I love both Rumi, and Tagore..though some of their poems confuse my western mind..
This was a fun write, I am glad you all liked it..
Namaste
ford

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2011-05-07 10:38 AM

Ford,

Louise and I would share Rumi over the bread and cheese, wine and conversation. We would read him, one to the other, and discuss the hidden essence of his words and world.

I often thought, after such discussions, that he, like Nostradamus, had a third-eye approach to a time beyond their moment in the day - as Rumi's words oft-times speak to the moment of this day.

This is beautiful - and while I haven't yet read Tagore, I'm positive both are very pleased with your work here.

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

7 posted 2011-05-07 05:26 PM

So beautiful.
I adore Rumi and am currently reading
The Glance.

On another note, can't help but say that I wish there were more enlightened souls to see the heart. As someone who has been around the block, I know what turns a man's head and most times its the buxom blonde, not the heart. We are so hopelessly human aren't we?

But I do love your poem and the perfect world I enterred upon reading it. Forgive me, if I interject my own observations of life.

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