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Open Poetry #47

Given my all...

Karleygirl
Junior Member

since 2010-08-05

Posts 20

0 posted 2011-05-05 11:51 PM

Extracurricular parallel to none,

I am Perpendictular

Hit them with the, "Oh now thats just ridiculous!!!"

We could have cleared up all these particulars,

That could have been the homicide vehicular,

You weren't in any state to speed off,

You were bugged out, Yeah, You were pissed off,

We were just chilling up at the ski loft,

Thinking we were on, now your telling me were off,

your whole vibe changed,

When you got that phone call,

Now thats the effect they call a snow ball,

Next thing you know i was running down the hall,

Saying please come back i had given my all.....

I have given my all...

Funny how you always knew how to make me feel so small...

because i DID give you my all... :/

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2011-05-06 01:55 AM

I like this. It's sad and I have been there, but I really like how you used words.

Alison

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-05-06 08:38 AM

Sometimes, many times, in fact, giving YOUR all means less than nothing unless they give theirs also. Liked the way you put this poem together.

~ Logical argument is what destroys poetry because poetry is beyond logic.—Robert Graves ~

Karleygirl
Junior Member

since 2010-08-05

Posts 20

3 posted 2011-05-06 09:40 PM

Thanks for commenting, guys... Im glad i know you enjoyed it(:

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