a spray of lilac - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2011-05-01 06:44 AM

The happiness
It is the first matter
That the glance steals you,
The weak indifference
Crosses your heart
And your soft houses,
Plunders your gardens,
As a violin tune
Frozen by the snow
Flakes fall
On this happiness
That I was not able to hide
And that far from pleasures,
Words of your past,
I finally gave up all that
like a spray of lilac.

[This message has been edited by 2islander2 (05-02-2011 06:32 AM).]

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2011-05-01 07:08 AM

"As a violin tune frozen by the snowflakes fall..." brilliant, yann. Lilacs are my favorite flower.
Ida

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-05-01 08:09 AM

Using the images of nature, plus the violin's bow playing a tune of melancholy, give this beauty of a poem much depth.

~ 99 percent of lawyers give the rest a bad name. ~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-05-01 05:28 PM

quote:
The weak indifference
Crosses your heart
And your soft houses,
Plunders your gardens,

The whole poem is remarkable, dear Yann, and I especially love the above lines because the truth is so beautifully expressed. It hurts, but if this happiness is linked to the scent of lilac (powerfully enveloping) it will haunt you and maybe you will even be given a second chance.

This is exquisitely done.

Love,
Margherita

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

4 posted 2011-05-01 05:48 PM

A poem woven together most cryptically, yet
simply glorious

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

5 posted 2011-05-01 06:39 PM

Very beautiful, Yann. I get that you are talking about new happiness ending, but I don't quite get what the spray of lilac has to do with giving up, but I am so glad the spray of lilac is there - it is a beautiful way to end the poem. Perhaps you mean that the way you give up is as gentle and positive as a spray of lilac is beautiful - that seems to fit after all, and very well - of course, I could have interpreted the poem completely wrongly, but whether I have or haven't, doesn't affect the fact that I find it lovely.

Owl

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2011-05-01 06:55 PM

I envisioned a wedding. If that was the premise for the vision of the poem, then I would certainly not hestiate to change a few key words...

But then, none will know until the author returns!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2011-05-01 10:00 PM

enjoyed...James

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2011-05-02 06:32 AM

thank Ida for the lilac perfumed comment, enjoyed it.

yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2011-05-02 06:34 AM

thanks jerry, happiness is always a deep question to be treated by lightness.

yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2011-05-02 06:37 AM

hello margherita for the beautiful comment, what I tried to express is that happiness is like a perfume of lilac, as delicate and friagile, and I let is go away for some time.

yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

11 posted 2011-05-02 06:39 AM

thanks a lot Emma for the kind comment.

yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

12 posted 2011-05-02 06:45 AM

hello Owl, thanks for the comment that proves me that I don't master english as I would like, for explanation I prefer to give you the original poem in french : may be I would be more easy :

Le bonheur
c’est la première chose
que le regard vous vole,
la pâle indifférence
franchit votre cœur
et vos tendres maisons,
pille vos jardins,
comme un air de violon
glacé par la neige
tombent les flocons
sur ce bonheur
que je n’ai pu cacher
et que loin des plaisirs,
des mots de ton passé,
j’ai fini par céder
comme un brin de lilas.

in fact that is the spray of lilac which symbolizes the happiness that I give up

yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

13 posted 2011-05-02 06:47 AM

hello sunshine, thanks for the kind comment, I should like you could like to read french words for better understanding or you can read the answer to Owl, it was not about a wedding, but it could be if the reader like it that way.

yann

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

14 posted 2011-05-02 06:47 AM

thanks james for reading and commenting.

yann

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

15 posted 2011-05-02 03:44 PM

Merci, Yann, pour le poème en français et l’explication. Commes tu sais bien, j’aime tellement la langue française, surtout la poésie française.

Owl

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

16 posted 2011-05-02 10:50 PM

Ahhh "the spary of lilac"..how easily those flowers fade, once cut.
An enjoyable, and deeply felt poem, once the translation is realized..
I think I get it...your reply to Owl gave me a clue.
Well done

नमस्ते,

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.