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Zeigeist
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0 posted 2011-04-25 12:14 PM



Clouds and Rain

It captures me.
As it always has
Flashing scenes of love
Batted about between us.
A soft trailing index finger
Down subtle skin, late
When the moon wants
To be the sun.

Words are…..
inappropriate interruptions
when eyes have each other.
Lips have their own hungers,
Parting when stolen are breaths.
There is nothing else but…
You, you and us, me.

Clocks are slowed,
Problems faded.
The glassy pool of you
Ripples at my touch.
Slippery wants and
Hard desires meet.

Oh, but to dream in life,
Live in dream, and
Arch and sigh,
For the moment of
Clouds and rain.

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Margherita
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1 posted 2011-04-25 12:52 PM


Passionate memories for cold days, yes.

One day the time will be ripe for new sunny emotions.

Sehr gut geschrieben!

Love,
Margherita

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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2 posted 2011-04-26 07:48 AM


Oh I love the flow of this. Wonderful, Enjoyed.

-Trina
A weakened heart is far from innocent.

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2011-04-26 08:03 AM


Nice work. I see the battle and thunderstorms as a merging of the physical in a grand display of sexual activity. I liked the way you moved your words around.

~ Passionate kiss, like spider web, leads to undoing of fly. ~

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4 posted 2011-04-30 08:50 PM


This is beautiful and very sensuous.  Loving it.

A

EmmaRose
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5 posted 2011-05-01 11:22 AM


I feel it, and that's a good thing
This is a real, gritty poem

Namyh
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6 posted 2011-05-01 07:49 PM


Zeitgeist - How can we appreciate those days of sun and wind unless we also have our days of clouds and rain. It strikes a balance in the soul. You crafted this with beauty Z. Namyh
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2011-05-06 07:27 PM


Enjoyed...James
Zeigeist
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8 posted 2011-05-15 08:53 PM


Thank you all for your kind replies to this poem.

Zeitgeist

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