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OwlSA
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0 posted 2011-04-24 07:07 AM



THE CONVERSATION
23 April 2011

It was a simple roadhouse
on a quiet, winding country road.
The bare tabletop
was a harsh blue panelyte
and their chairs were mismatched;
his was a little rickety,
but none of that mattered;
patrons came and went
and their coffee grew cold
and the earth forgot
to turn on its axis
because they were immersed
in a conversation
that mattered
and didn’t.

Owl

© Copyright 2011 Diana van den Berg - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 2011-04-24 08:44 AM


As I read I kept wondering where the conversation was coming from and from whom, until I got to the last line. The killer (in a good sense) last line. Brava.

~ A lion will not cheat on his wife, but a Tiger Wood. ~

Margherita
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2 posted 2011-04-24 12:49 PM


Oh, I love this, dear Owl. What mattered was staying together. Conversation of some sense is almost impossible when love creates chaos of emotion.

Excellent.

Love,
Margherita

Word Weaver
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3 posted 2011-04-24 02:43 PM


Your mastery of words never ceases to amaze me. I love the entire thing. You led us on a great path to a superb ending. This is a keeper.


Spiros Zafiris
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4 posted 2011-04-25 03:17 AM


..yes, a wonderful poem..!
OwlSA
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5 posted 2011-04-25 03:38 AM


Thank you, Jerry, for your kind words.

Thank you, Margherita.  You are right about the chaos of emotion, but simultaneously and paradoxically, there can be a peace and tranquillity that goes beyond the passion.

Thank you Marcia.  Smiling at the honour you do me.

Thank you, Spiros.  I am glad you enjoyed it.

Owl

2islander2
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6 posted 2011-04-25 04:12 AM


I adore this, diana, the implication of the outside elements with conversation just seems perfect and unveils the deep of this conversation, I think you are in a row right now and share superb and numerous poems which are enchantment...Thanks a lot

yann

OwlSA
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7 posted 2011-04-25 12:08 PM


Thank you Yann for your very kind words.

Owl

Martie
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8 posted 2011-04-25 01:58 PM


Diana...I love how you created this scene.  It could have been anywhere human and you wrote right to the heart of it.
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9 posted 2011-04-25 02:53 PM


Proving once again why you are among the best this site has to offer.
I loved the imagery in this piece as I have been there many times.

Great job

Life's journey is not to arrive at the grave safely in a well preserved body, but rather to skid in sideways, totally worn out, shouting, "WHAT A RIDE

OwlSA
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10 posted 2011-04-25 03:17 PM


Thank you, Martie, for understanding the heart of it.  

Thank you kindly, Ringo, Sir she said.  I am honoured by what you say.

Owl

Marchmadness
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11 posted 2011-04-26 01:15 AM


Your writng has been just amazing lately, Diana.
           Ida

OwlSA
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12 posted 2011-04-26 11:20 AM


Thank you, Ida, for your lovely compliment!  Smiling again!

Owl

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