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Last Dance |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ I never wanted more than you gave for we wouldn't have been what we became even if we'd had the chance. You remain a bright sparkle encased in velvet set deep in my heart. I found solace in the free reign and took refuge when the thunder clapped breaking through the clouds caught up in a jet stream you made the heavens glow. You are the whole of a lightning storm striking me; arranging the pieces of my heart quieting my fears that once tormented me in my darkest hour. Even now I waver in the moment and the residue left behind, like the calm that lingers after a storm and the silent pitter patter hangs in the breeze. The sun promises so much but if it doesn't shine tomorrow I will always feel you next to me when I'm teetering beside myself, rising with the tide between heaven and earth holding you there warm to the touch. You fill the hollow sound echoing in my private chambers, you are the rhythm to the songs I sing the last dance and mis-step playing me in the wind waltzing outside in the rain the one who moves me. Yet I'm not cold or unsung without you you're my mercury rising to some degree and I've taken care to arrange you in keeping in that place where you've touched me so deeply. You're the warming trend I wrote of in the beginning. Since then I've learned to adjust to the changing temperatures, tucking you in beside me. With a quiet understanding and an ounce of grace I realize there is no predicting the forecast for love is a fickle one and our fate is it's own meter reading. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I've never read such a loving poem in my life. ~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I'm so with Jerry on this...one of a kind beautiful. Lori |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hey JP and Lori~ Thanks for your heartfelt replies, they mean a lot and I appreciate them very much |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Bluesie... quote: Loss is peculiar and particular and oh so personal... but to share loss...is especial... and between us? We do it because it was! |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Love given and shown and kept as it was meant to be.Lovely work.latearrival |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, dear Bluesy gal, this is fantastic and the fact that I'm pretty tearful now is besides the point. You have written an absolute gem and one to be admired by many - and taken to heart and felt - well, maybe not as much as I'm feeling it at the moment because it plays havoc with the eyes but I sure would feel sorry for them if they didn't feel it. Lovely, Lori, simply lovely!  Helen |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
This is INDEED "Romanticism" most fine !! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"You remain a bright sparkle encased in velvet..." As do you.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Babyblue... when you have on your love shirt you are such a lovey dancer..enjoyed you here babe |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is true unconditional love, wrapped in the most refined romantic poetry. Thank you, dear Lori, for this hauntingly beautiful piece. My heart says yes to every word. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Sunshine for leaving your warm reply. Going to bask in it for a little longer methinks. Latearrival~ You summed it up so well and with all the love I was trying to convey. Thank you. Hi Honey girl~ Oh don't be sad, it's hard to make peace with our fate, but when we do it's worth all the tears. Thank you for reading and for caring the way you do. Dreampoet~ Thanks for reading and for leaving a kind word. Icebox~ That's very nice of you to say so. Thanks a bunch. Dude~ So glad you like my shirt, just for you.. Margherita~ Unconditional is the keyword. Thank you for reading my heart and for always taking the time to be here. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Just had another read! Still lovely the second time around! Helen |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oops! I thought I had replied to this! It is very, very beautiful and special indeed, Blues and shows what a lovely person you are! Owl |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
You have such a way with words of Love. A light tender touch, but so powerful on the reader's heart. Much enjoyed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Honey girl~ Lady Owl, thanks for stopping by and leaving your nice reply. Emmarose~ Thank you for reading beyond the words and for your gracious replies to my poetry. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for dropping by, James~ |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
You must have been reading my life, for you expressed it so perfectly. This is truly one of your best writes. Life's journey is not to arrive at the grave safely in a well preserved body, but rather to skid in sideways, totally worn out, shouting, "WHAT A RIDE |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I am so flattered, thank you very much, Ringo~ |
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