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Open Poetry #47

Sssh

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-04-21 06:13 PM

Mother, where are you?
Sssh, you have to be quiet.
Why? Daddy's found us?

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-04-21 08:01 PM

it made me gasp Jerry, I tried to reread it and make it be just innocent hide and seek but I just couldn't keep it from making my blood run cold.
Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-04-21 08:42 PM

It was supposed to, Lori. Thanks for the read.

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2011-04-22 02:42 AM

Very ouch!

Owl

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2011-04-22 07:10 AM

Yep. Thanks, Owl.

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-04-27 05:41 PM

I'm with Lori on this one...you do have a knack when it comes to startling your readers...and we always come back for more...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-04-27 05:49 PM

I appreciate your comments, steavenr, very much.

~ Passionate kiss, like spider web, leads to undoing of fly. ~

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