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Open Poetry #47

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SilentShadow
Junior Member

since 2006-04-20

Posts 32
Fl. U.S.A.

0 posted 2011-04-20 11:19 PM

night be swift,
when sleep's uncertain,
save my shattered soul from hurting,
a tear is shed,
that lifts the curtain,
that hides the truth of loves true burden...

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2011-04-20 11:53 PM

So what's the truth of love's true burden? What's behind the curtain? Tell me! I must know!

Or is it that love is a burden in and of itself? I don't know.. pondering now..

Thanks, by the way, for making me ponder.

Enjoyed.

SilentShadow
Junior Member

since 2006-04-20

Posts 32
Fl. U.S.A.

2 posted 2011-04-21 08:08 AM

sometimes love itself is a burden, especially when you love someone who's love for you may only be a manifestation of a fantasy for them, and may never come to fruition..., funny, I didn't realize that this was the anniversary of my first post...

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-04-21 10:51 AM

Beautifully composed. You got your point across.

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2011-04-21 08:23 PM

So sad but so very well expressed.

The night can be a very lonely place.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-04-27 05:36 PM

"a tear is shed,
that lifts the curtain,
that hides the truth of loves true burden"

...cool phrase in an excellent write...reads aloud very well...nice job

Southernfury
New Member
Posts 5

6 posted 2015-07-23 10:21 AM

so Beautiful, but so heartbreakingly sad because i know your pain

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