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SilentShadow
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0 posted 04-20-2011 11:19 PM       View Profile for SilentShadow   Email SilentShadow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SilentShadow

night be swift,
when sleep's uncertain,
save my shattered soul from hurting,
a tear is shed,
that lifts the curtain,
that hides the truth of loves true burden...
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1 posted 04-20-2011 11:53 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

So what's the truth of love's true burden? What's behind the curtain? Tell me! I must know!

Or is it that love is a burden in and of itself? I don't know.. pondering now..

Thanks, by the way, for making me ponder.

Enjoyed.
SilentShadow
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2 posted 04-21-2011 08:08 AM       View Profile for SilentShadow   Email SilentShadow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SilentShadow

sometimes love itself is a burden, especially when you love someone who's love for you may only be a manifestation of a fantasy for them, and may never come to fruition..., funny, I didn't realize that this was the anniversary of my first post...
JerryPat2
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3 posted 04-21-2011 10:51 AM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Beautifully composed. You got your point across.

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~
BluesSerenade
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4 posted 04-21-2011 08:23 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

So sad but so very well expressed.

The night can be a very lonely place.
steavenr
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5 posted 04-27-2011 05:36 PM       View Profile for steavenr   Email steavenr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit steavenr's Home Page   View IP for steavenr

"a tear is shed,
that lifts the curtain,
that hides the truth of loves true burden"

...cool phrase in an excellent write...reads aloud very well...nice job
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6 posted 07-23-2015 10:21 AM       View Profile for Southernfury   Email Southernfury   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Southernfury

so Beautiful, but so heartbreakingly sad because i know your pain
 
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