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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-04-19 10:32 AM


you did that thing with your velvet glances
placing them carefully over the chrome I had on
like smoothing over something was more important
than just using the shimmer shine for reflecting

and after on the stairs in your evening sensitivity
you let the lights of those candles show between
where we had already decided to get deeper into
and where we were moving well beyond stopping

perhaps it was the morning after that morning after
when you brought soup in a can and crackers
with that backpack still in price tag newness
and a baseball cap instead of exercising hairdos

you left your tennis shoes untied on purpose
for scuffing across voyeuristic bedroom floors
barefoot and hurrying back to that line again
where you said heaven and hell just zipped together

but you loved how you felt right after undoing them

___________

daark


[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (04-20-2011 07:46 AM).]

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1 posted 2011-04-19 10:47 AM


"where you said heaven and hell just zipped together

but you loved how you felt right after undoing them"

Is it okay for me to tell you I'm in love? :-P

Word Weaver
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2 posted 2011-04-19 10:54 AM


I love this poem and escpecially the line,

"where you said heaven and hell just zipped together"

Namaste,
Marcia


OwlSA
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3 posted 2011-04-19 11:13 AM


Harley hints, candlelight, canned soup, crackers and barefeet delightfully ensconced in a perfect blend of other lovelies!  Dreamy!

Owl

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2011-04-19 11:24 AM


ms K...thanks babe..in love? that is right outside of malibu yes?

_______________

ms wordweaver, thanks lady for the glance

_________________

ladyOwl..thanks lady friend for whispering by

Margherita
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5 posted 2011-04-20 05:21 AM


quote:
you left your tennis shoes untied on purpose
for scuffing across voyeuristic bedroom floors
barefoot and hurrying back to that line again
where you said heaven and hell just zipped together

but you loved how you felt right after undoing them



Wow, love this imagery, dear D.! Nothing like barefoot sensations ...

Wonderful.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2011-04-20 07:44 AM


ms mar...thank you for lifting this hem and peeking under
voodootongue
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7 posted 2011-04-20 01:46 PM


Loved it. Put a smile on my face for all the right reasons.
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2011-04-21 12:32 PM


voodooT'  Thanks for the grins
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