navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #47 » A Heart to Heart
Open Poetry #47
Post A Reply Post New Topic A Heart to Heart Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Namyh
Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988


0 posted 2011-04-15 07:16 PM


A Heart to Heart

High above arched mountaintops
where slope the sunlit green treetops
and Sky's foundation, made of blue,
is Heaven's bottom floor,
a spiral staircase lead straight up
and smelled of fresh cake uncorrupt
then emptied to a chambered room
just past a chambered door.

A giant scale loomed silent there
suspending plates each side on air
and Osiris sat a jewelled throne
of gold and blue and red.
My time was up. It was too late
to change my Life, to change my Fate
when Anubis, large with jackal ears,
said "Here we judge the Dead."

"One side the scale is placed your heart
wherein wisdom rests from end to start.
Man fools himself and thinks to gain
but wisdom rests not in the brain.
Lightened is the heart that lifts Humanity
from evil, waste and a world's insanity.
Heavy is the heart that drags Man down
to selfishly gain some feeble ground."

"And no lie or alibi from them fails to dupe
the scale's prime measurer, the Feather of Truth.
For a lightened heart will not the Feather overtip
but one made heavy will the scale down dip
and the Devourer will come, croc jaws ice cold,
eating hearts heavy made by deeds of heartless Souls.
But the lightened heart will pass to a cosmic clime
where Souls commune the universe 'til Resurrection time."

"Now your hour has come and you tremble with Fear.
They're bringing your heart. It's close. It's near.
You've had a lifetime of heartbeats, true and untrue.
Now their worth against the Feather is the measure of you."

"Step forward !"

Namyh



© Copyright 2011 Namyh - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2011-04-15 08:12 PM


I LIKE THIS. Well structured. Excellent premise and the balance of the heart is the surprising question. I had to read it twice. Not because I didn't fathom the poem, but just because it was so damn well written. This put me in a wonderful mood, although there is a part of me that wonders how the heart will balance out. But not much. Cheers! on good work.

~ At the siege of Vienna in 1683 Islam seemed poised to overrun Christian Europe. We are in a new phase of a very old war. ~

katahdin
Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
2 posted 2011-04-15 08:17 PM


Wonderful poem! enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2011-04-16 01:02 AM


Stunning!  I loved the heart of this.

Owl

abhursty
Junior Member
since 2009-02-25
Posts 45

4 posted 2011-04-16 11:33 PM


Wow... That's seriously my comment. Just wow. I love the story, and the writing... Just wow... (Sorry, it's a bit late.)
Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2011-04-17 09:05 AM


You always stir my interest and admiration. Love your poetic ponderings here. I think you have got it right ...

So let's keep the hearts feather light ... beautiful thought.

Love,
Margherita

Namyh
Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988

6 posted 2011-04-17 05:41 PM


JerryP - Some poets will make it to that cosmic clime and some won’t. If I make it, I hope to meet everybody there for the Poetry Fest in the Elysian fields. That’s why I’m repacking my luggage now. I was carrying too much weight and had to get rid of some or pay for it like the airlines make you do when you fly the friendly skies or when you just might be coming up against the Feather of Truth. So if they throw in this poem, your wonderful mood and comments, I might just make it. Thanks Jerry………….In Advance! Namyh

Knowing this put a ‘wonderful’ in your day puts one in mine. Thanks Kat. Namyh

Owl – The heart is at the center of things most of the time and is the best place to be stunned. You confirm my aim was on target and hit its mark. Thanks Owl. Namyh

Abhursty – One ‘Wow’ and I can change the world. Two ‘Wows” and I can save mankind. Three ‘Wows” and I’m your fan. Thanks Abhursty for loving the story and the writing. Wow! Namyh

(Margherita) – I manufactured this poetic pondering with 4 ½  cups of luminescent Hope, 3 tablespoons of radiant Confidence, 2 glowing drops of crystal Belief, a dab of butter and a small 7-up, then baked for 30 minutes. And if it stirred your interest and admiration, I could proudly say I got the recipe right and it’s keeping the feather light. Thanks M for stopping in for a bite. Namyh


Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #47 » A Heart to Heart

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary