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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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0 posted 2011-04-13 09:54 PM

Heartsleeve clung to the dark
like the night sky held the moon
the dark pressing her into
the lovely lunar light
illuminating
her finest features

LGR(C)4/13/11

[This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (04-14-2011 11:24 AM).]

JerryPat2
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1 posted 2011-04-13 11:14 PM

There's a lovebite in this somewhere. Must be that moon that makes me think that way.

~ At the siege of Vienna in 1683 Islam seemed poised to overrun Christian Europe. We are in a new phase of a very old war. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 2011-04-13 11:18 PM

must be...

JerryPat2
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3 posted 2011-04-13 11:22 PM

Hope that wasn't an inappropriate comment.

~ At the siege of Vienna in 1683 Islam seemed poised to overrun Christian Europe. We are in a new phase of a very old war. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 2011-04-14 08:17 AM

No jerry you weren't being inapropriate, I was trying to sound mysterious...

jwesley
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5 posted 2011-04-14 09:35 AM

Actually, I saw her waiting for Bearwolf to step from the shadows and be madly passionate in the moonlights softness . . .

j.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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6 posted 2011-04-14 09:39 AM

J-I don't believe I'm aquainted with Bearwolf...is there a story there?

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2011-04-14 10:59 AM

Now this is some great imagery. I think [since you asked] that I would make only one change, and that would be to drop the "of" in line four...

but that would be it.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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8 posted 2011-04-14 11:24 AM

consider it gone

jwesley
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9 posted 2011-04-15 07:31 PM

No story, just a name that seemed to fit with Heartsleeve.

j.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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10 posted 2011-04-15 07:43 PM

I Like it. I liked your comment too.
Lori

JerryPat2
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11 posted 2011-04-19 08:29 AM

Hi Lori. I got a message that you had commented on "The Angel Said . . ." but your comment isn't there. PiP goofing up I guess.

~ Don't insult the alligator till after you cross the river. ~

Martie

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12 posted 2011-04-19 12:43 PM

Lori...There is something that happens to everything the moon touches, making it more lovely...like this poem.

2islander2
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13 posted 2011-04-19 02:12 PM

hi Lori, what a gorgeous scene and imagery, I loved the magical and brilliant poem. a delicious surprise.

yann

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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14 posted 2011-04-19 02:19 PM

Marti and Yann- Thanks for stopping in for the read. I'm glad you liked it. I like moons have one tatooed on my ankle.
Lori

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