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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2011-04-13 09:18 AM


you said you were late for your appointment
and that is was all my fault again
for not stopping you before the middle
of that song you sing when you are lost

and making you look at the photography
of glove-less hands pointing at moments
and clocks going counter clock wise slowly
so you could adjust your schedule to sometime

and arrive elsewhere some other tomorrow
instead of the one we were both leaning into
with just a sliver of our skin lingering behind
holding us locked into yesterday evening

but then you heard our musical rivering
as it slid down the glass of strangers windows
into that pools of our needed kneading
you said you would just have to go home later

since late in love was better than alone on time


____________

daark



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steavenr
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1 posted 2011-04-13 05:19 PM


I love the correlation of "so you could adjust your schedule to sometime" to "since late in love was better than alone on time"

...a very pensive piece...nice, extremely nice

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2011-04-13 05:56 PM


thanks amigo...I appreciate your deep reads.
EmmaRose
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3 posted 2011-04-13 08:56 PM


Deeply supericial
and superficially deep
we get the best of your
insightful nuances

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2011-04-14 06:25 AM


uh-huh..what she said..thanks er
BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2011-04-14 07:52 PM


Gotta love the way you spin it.  
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2011-04-15 07:43 AM


babyblue....could always use a hand turning it..thanks babe
OwlSA
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7 posted 2011-04-15 05:41 PM


Thank you for making me slow down to the speed of lightning (or perhaps even a little slower), as my son sometimes succeeds in getting me to do too.  Slow smiles.

I loved every nuance of this, but I was particularly fascinated by the ambiguity of the word "on" in the title.

Owl

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8 posted 2011-04-15 06:15 PM


lady Owl..

timing is everything lady..when we least expect it yes?  Thanks lady

Margherita
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9 posted 2011-04-17 07:08 AM


Sigh ... how do you do it?

Amazing how you create emotions with your magical POETRY, dear POET!

What else can one say ... oh, I am in the middle of that song!

Love and joy.
Margherita

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10 posted 2011-04-18 05:43 AM


ms mar, thank you lady friend for your eyes and smile words.
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11 posted 2011-04-30 08:38 PM


If this is time travelling, I'll have more please.

xoxoxo
Ali-san

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12 posted 2011-05-01 06:55 AM


thanks little one....I appreciate you
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