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Brick on brick |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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I have two piles of bricks called He Knew and Didn't Do and I think to fashion them into a fortress round my soul. No drawbridge 'cause I know foundations laid on ego beds will soon one day collapse and let the loving in. Still and all, I think to be the architect of stubbornness and engineer of righteousness here on my pedestal. Brick on brick, brick on brick, how useless building what will fall yet build I do with no drawbridge to my own off-centre plans. Only when I'm balanced twixt this world and the next can I rest beside still waters and suffer your meanderings ~ but I have two piles of bricks! Helen / 10 April 2011 |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Neatly conceived... I might know somebody like this, maybe that dawdler in the mirror. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Helen, you keep coming up with the darnedest poetry. Your way with a phrase is just wonderful, slightly askew and very deep. Enjoy the hell out of reading you. ~ Why do we drive on a parkway and park on a driveway? ~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I love what you come up with, it's the piecing of your emotions, or shall I say stacking them to build such fascinating poetry. I'm really taken with your insight and self expression. good good, honey girl~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you easy1. They do say that everyone else is just a mirror of ourselves. I haven't yet come to grips with that except to rationalize it by thinking that we're all "capable" of doing what the other does. Jerry - If I was inclined to blush then I'd be blushing but as it is 'tis just a bit of water in my eyes. Thank you so much. Dear Bluesy gal - You're perhaps my only long-standing reader (so many years) and I hope you know how grateful I am for that. I wouldn't be on the blue pages if not for you so when I say 'thank you' please know that it's for more than just your comment. Thank you! Love Helen |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I built a castle like this, a long time ago... ... I thought I needed it. the mortar's been getting a little weak in some spots lately... I think I going to leave it alone, and if it falls, then so be it, I'll finally be free. This was great Helen  Richard |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Richard - It will fall! If it doesn't you can ... sue me! Glad you enjoyed!Helen |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
The thing that bothers me is 'I knew - and Didn't do" - and all the effort possible can never replace the moment past. Very well spoken piece, my friend...much enjoyed the read. j. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Helen you are always a treat and always a new flavor to love! Lori |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, JW. We're all guilty of the knowing and not doing but although I know moments past won't come again, they can be overcome with love and forgiveness. Sadly, a lot of us, myself included, are guilty of not loving and not forgiving. Hi Lori. Thanks for popping in and, yes, the different flavours of love - so many. Helen |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Bunches of Honey, your poetry is highly distinctive and uniquely your own. I like how you wrap your poetic brain around your thoughts, ideas, and emotions. Yours is not the run-of-the-mill poetry. You put a lot of thought into it and it always makes me think. You don't spoon-feed the reader! lol Love 'n hugs, Linda |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, my dear Linda, you made me smile because, no, I don't spoon feed and (I'll tell you a secret) I don't put much thought into what I write. It just comes all by itself - well, okay then, by myself. I thought of you today wondering how you are and then up you pop! So good to see you here! Thank you for your lovely comment. I do hope you are progressing well.  Helen |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
found myself chuckling from the start to the finish...enjoyed every word...not quite sure the exact reason I was chuckling, but I do know that this was a pleasure to read...thank you for sharing |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, Steaven. I've got it! You were chuckling because like many of us you also knew and didn't do. Glad you enjoyed and that you chuckled! |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Your writings suggest great wit and insight into the human condition. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks, ER. The human condition - yes, so varied and diverse it is. Gotta just laugh at it all! Helen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Someday, someone's gonna take a few bricks out from the bottom and there you'll be wrapped in the arms of destiny, smile on smile. I know these things, a licensed emotional structural engineer. That'd be me. Eric |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Eric - - Had to laugh at your reply - thanks for that. I have a little problem with destiny though - is there such a thing or are we the construction crew responsible for it? Helen |
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