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Open Poetry #47

Lost...

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

0 posted 2011-04-09 01:53 PM

Lost in a tunnel
of faded dreams,
were only darkness
leads the way.
Where hope is
lost, doom fills
the air, swallowing
up the room, as
they struggle to
breath.
There hollow eyes
and misplaced souls,
walk in silence,
used to darkness
as they wander
aimlessly.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2011-04-09 02:08 PM

I imagine everyone here can relate to this sad, somber poetry. Life and love, there are so many pitfalls and roadblocks.

~ When your Mom is mad at your Dad, don't let her brush your hair. ~

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2011-04-09 03:15 PM

This reminds me of how happy I am when I find myself again. Yes, we get lost ~ but, hopefully, not for long. Good expression, Dreamgal.

A

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-04-09 03:43 PM

Really dark atmosphere, dear Dreamgal. It's just as you say it so well. It is possible to change focus, but sometimes help is needed to find the way out again. Help in form of loving care.

Love,
Margherita

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

4 posted 2011-04-09 03:57 PM

Thank you all for your perspectives on my writing. I always appreciate it so much.

Love,
Dreamgal

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2011-04-12 06:59 PM

Fine writing...James

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2011-04-13 05:24 PM

"There hollow eyes
and misplaced souls,
walk in silence,
used to darkness
as they wander
aimlessly"

...very cool lines in a very cool write...nice

dreamgal
Member

since 2011-03-17

Posts 442

7 posted 2011-04-13 05:29 PM

Thank you so much for stopping by and your compliment. Appreciate it.

Dreamgal

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