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skittle skattle thoughts |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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here i am still waiting, just anticipating what will lie ahead debating, contemplating the things that we once said you’ve got me in a dream world, oscillating tilt-a-whirl world, a spinning, slide and swirl world i am over my head it is too much to consider, i am truly in a dither; my heart writhes and whithers as all my rhymes slither off the page to die away the words will fall away while I am like a feather, unstable like the weather slipping from a tied-up tether on my way to being free it is freedom I am craving, enough of wild raving midnight desire craving while i am caving the only thing worth saving is me. --- Alison |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Maybe a tab of Ativan will calm you down, that is it you really want calmed down. Hah! I tried to read this fun piece out loud and had to give up on dither. Enjoyed. ~ If you don't want gays in the military, make the uniforms ugly. ~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY interesting 'write' !! |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
I thought it was very good Allison, im a little dizzy but it was well written. Thanks for sharing! Smiles Dreamgal |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thanks, Jerry. It was a moment of playing with words. Thanks for the drug suggestion ~ can't wait to see what you think of my humus growing on trees poem. A - Hey, Bruce. I wrote this for an assignment on using consonants and scrapped it. But, I still kind of enjoy it. It makes me smile. A - Dreamgirl. Yep, it's a dizzy ride. Kind of makes my headache but it still makes me want to laugh. I love those kind of rides. Thank you. Alison |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There you go, gotta love the tilt-a-whirl. This was really fun Alison, like being at an amusement park, and you get the gold fish!!  |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you for riding and laughing with me, Blusey one. xoxoxo A |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Ali hon, this was brill as youshe... one just needs a little rythym in their rumba to follow along, I'm glad you have that too! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Hey, don't look now, but we are dancing! A |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
This is delightful, Alison. Always hang on to those last 2 lines! Owl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
That's what I'm talking about --- I just love it when people get all their ca-ca together and shout out their true feelings. You go, my friend, let it all hang out!! j. (lol) |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thanks for the smiles Alison ... I very much enjoyed the tilt-a-whirl of rhymes cascading and darting throughout this delightful piece! Lots of fun! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Allison...My mind is a tilt a whirl from your play on words, but I liked it...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
I liked the read, the whirl until the finish, sensible and o so true |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Diana. I promise to always try and fight to. xoxoxo Alison - Hey, J-man, thank you ~ I have no problems letting my ca-ca out in poetry. I can beat my chest with the best of them ~ and bawl my words into some kind of mish-mash of something. Thank you so much, my dear friend. Alison _ Thank you for ridin' along, Kit. I love those spinning rides! A - Ah, Paul, thank you for liking it and for staying with it. Alison - EmmaRose, Thank you. It's a pleasure to see your comment.  Alison |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Good, I'm glad you will, Alison. Owl |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, lovely Alison, this was just the right piece of poetry to find my smile again after Namyh's poem which had put me in a fearful mess. You are cuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuute, girlie, and I love your rhymes and you. Margherita |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"the only thing worth saving is me." ...your conclusion is spot-on and refreshing...loved your word plays (all of them) |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Yup! The ending punched me in the gut, very true. Missed ya! |
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Daddy Goose38 Member
since 2010-09-04
Posts 430obama's a rice paper tiger |
Ali deserves all the godd and beautiful that Life will give her. So stay out of her way. :----------) Love, |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
well look at you shine  love your playful wording. I was gonna take the munchkin to an amusement park, but maybe I'll just her read this instead, it's got all the ups, downs, swirls and twirls that the rides do! |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
Well worth saving. <3 |
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