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Open Poetry #47

Sometimes The Cruelest Person is The One You Love

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

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In your dreams

0 posted 2011-04-06 07:09 PM

Sometimes The Cruelest Person is the One You Love

Empty bird cage
The earth sinks when it trembles
On black, cracked, pavement...

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2011-04-07 04:58 AM

The empty bird cage gives mixed feelings, freedom and sadness. Your words convey great anxiety.

Powerful.

Love,
Margherita

[This message has been edited by Margherita (04-07-2011 08:29 AM).]

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2011-04-07 05:57 AM

Hey lady...

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2011-04-08 09:07 PM

Came back in for about the fourth time and while I really like the roll of the words, still not sure I understand it.

But then, I don't understand my wife either...Hah!

Still, I greatly enjoy the way you write, my friend, and read you when I find you, and usually understand...(I've gotten older though...)

j.

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-04-08 09:13 PM

intriguing piece of work...your title is perfect and the words you chose for this poem are exceptional

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2011-04-08 09:24 PM

The kind of poem that just leaves me thinking and longing for a hug.

A

Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

6 posted 2011-04-09 02:29 AM

.

Juju,

It can be worst . . .
Many see, (though they won't admit it
even to themselves), marriage as the legal right
when they wish to make someone miserable . . .
I assume you still know how to close or go though
a door.

John

.

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

7 posted 2011-04-09 04:15 AM

I am young and unbound, I have the option of not being god... and leaving the window shut.

however, who knows what the future brings

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2011-04-09 11:50 PM

Fine writing...James

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

9 posted 2011-04-10 02:41 AM

superb writing, feelings can be cruel and you expressed that with perfection.

yann

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